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Catch Me Please
Contributed by
ginsdance
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Tuesday, 15th October 2002 @ 01:30:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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Hold me please,
Catch me now before I fall,
I need you now more than ever before,
Will you answer my silent call?
Please be there for me,
I beg of you, now that the time has come,
Even though you probably won't admit it,
You know that you are the one,
The only one
Who can help me through this dark,
Please just hold me close tonight,
Prove to me that this wasn't just a farce...
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2002-10-15 13:30:00]
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Re: Catch Me Please
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 15th October 2002 @ 02:27:21 PM AEST
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Nice one, Gin
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Re: Catch Me Please
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 15th October 2002 @ 11:02:24 PM AEST
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Hi Gin... this is good but you lost the flow with the last line... rhyming with "tonight" would have made it much better... understand that I am not criticizing you just giving you an honest opinion... you choose whether to take it or not....
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Re: Catch Me Please
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by ginsdance on
Wednesday, 16th October 2002 @ 11:15:46 AM AEST
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Hey Daniela... I can understand your point, and thanks for the constructive critism... however, rhyming with "tonight" wouldn't have flown well when I wrote it, because it defies the rhyme scheme... maybe if I reworked that last stanza.... hmm... thanks for giving me something to think about...
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