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Double Suicide
Contributed by
brigitte7735
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Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:02:17 PM in AEST
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Dearest parents, I forgive you for driving us to this
Oft I hope you think of me and fondly reminisce
Understand the reasoning, if you still remember how
Broken dreams refuse to die, and lover's break no vow
Longevity of life provides a sparse substitute
Elope to the end, lover's asseveration absolute
Selfish it may seem, but I shall no longer obey
Unreasonable to a fault, this is the price you pay
Ingenue of fifteen, became a woman regardless
Crossed my fingers, hoped to die, blossoming and timeless
Inked these words to prove he loves me as you never did
Don't bother objecting, you're too late to further forbid
Enslaved to you no more, you're daughter's already dead
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Re: Double Suicide
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by RhythmBndt on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:06:39 PM AEST
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Enslaved to you no more, you're daughter's already dead
Powerful closing line. Very good. |
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Re: Double Suicide
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:20:22 PM AEST
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Crossed my fingers, hoped to die, blossoming and timeless
The entire piece is powerful... but this line --- this line is.... dynamic. It is very nearly enough if it stood alone.
This makes me remember being desperately in love as a teenager and makes me so incredibly thankful that my family was supportive. I'm rather sure I would have felt like dying if they weren't. Beautiful, Vanessa... truly. |
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Re: Double Suicide
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:21:28 PM AEST
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I hope they aren't issues worth offing yourself. Of course they aren't. Nothing should be. The best revenge is a happy life.
Stitch |
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Re: Double Suicide
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by LonghornGal on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:34:46 PM AEST
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I love this poem....I fell as if I wrote it myself, the words fit me to a T....I feel in love with someone and gave him my virginity. I do not regret it still to this day, but my parents don't approve, and wont let us be together even though we are in love. They say we're too young to know what love is, but I do know. He loves me more than they ever could. They don't accept me and he does. Ive often had thoughts of suicide myself. But all you can do is hold on and keep reassuring yourself that someday your parents won't be able to control what you do or who you see. And you'll finally be able to be together. At least thats what Im going through. Keep up the great work and thanks for this share....i didnt think that anyone knew what Im going through, but now i do....
Kayla
PS~ Im also 15 |
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Re: Double Suicide
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 01:44:49 AM AEST
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Well Put Vanessa. Great Poem.
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Re: Double Suicide
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by forever_lonely on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 07:53:32 PM AEST
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Very very very powerful piece Vanessa, especially the penultimate and final line
''Don't bother objecting, you're too late to further forbid
Enslaved to you no more, you're daughter's already dead''
Something about the penultimate line strike a chord with me, maybe its something to do with my own parents always forbidding me to do things who knows but this was ever power in its own right.
Thoughout the poem i kept getting an image of Romeo and Juliet i dont know why, i just did, well Juliet more than anything strange i know, but thats why i like who i am, because im different lol
Luke |
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