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The Last Fall
Contributed by
essentially9
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Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:23:27 PM in AEST
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The Last Fall
With the choices made
There is Hell to pay
The cycle continues the same
Making the same mistakes over
Wishing I would have learned before
My downfall is coming closer
There is Hell to pay
For ever believing in anything
When reality is a fake to the unseen
I shall never trust again
It's worth nothing in the end
I'm ashamed to live with it
But I can't help it
I can't prevent what's happened
But I can't help it
I'll make the same mistakes over
The cycle continues the same
I don't need this
But I deserve it
I've come so far
For ever living at all
My downfall
These thoughts swirl in my head
The choices then reply over
And I can't take it anymore
With the choices made
There is Hell to pay
This is life's way
Of getting back at you
This is life's way
Of killing you
There is no other way
You've come so far
For living at all
Your downfall
To Hell we fall
To Hell with it
Living was useless
We've come so far
For living at all
Our downfall
The last fall
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Re: The Last Fall
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by evilfairy on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:27:36 PM AEST
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| Really interesting poem. i liked it a lot... |
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Re: The Last Fall
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by holderofthestone on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:32:39 PM AEST
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| Nice. such a powerful write. A++++ |
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Re: The Last Fall
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by poetrygodslove on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:46:32 PM AEST
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| taking chances. learning and finding out ... good write. take care. sandy |
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Re: The Last Fall
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:33:02 PM AEST
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| I found myself frustrated with this - I want to say the same things you are saying to yourself - Nice job capturing that. It is always great to evoke something in the reader |
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Re: The Last Fall
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 09:44:05 PM AEST
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The devastation felt here is very heavy. I am glad I do not see life in this vein. Reality is real and not always pretty but we can change our own reality to some extent. Mistakes are to be learned from. They make us stronger in the end. Good luck.
Rita |
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Re: The Last Fall
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by Tom on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 10:33:45 AM AEST
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| It seems you have ventured into the inner abyss, you are brave and rare. |
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Re: The Last Fall
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by Tom on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 10:35:03 AM AEST
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| It seems you have ventured into the inner abyss, you are brave and rare. |
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Re: The Last Fall
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by Dereku on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 08:25:42 PM AEST
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Mistakes can make us stronger, but they can also make us so weak that we no longer want to venture on. At least...it's happened to me....some mistakes I can never get over, and never will.
I liked it. It sorta words what I believe, to an extent. Very good. |
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