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I cannot stay away
Contributed by
purplestary
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Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 02:08:37 PM in AEST
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I said I wouldn’t come back
but I lied again you see.
I’ll come back again
in hopes that your still here
I tried to stay away
but you treat me as a yo yo
you reel me back
each and every time
what is it about you?
what makes me stay around?
I guess it’s better not to question
and let it be what it is.
Copyright ©
purplestary
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2004-06-09 14:08:37]
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Re: I cannot stay away
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 02:12:26 PM AEST
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Restructured this could be a FINE poem. It is not crappy! It just needs some structure other than that it's fine to post what you feel! That's why I love this site. It's therapy for me! lol
Keep up the good work!
Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: I cannot stay away
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by WoodyMc44 on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 02:49:10 PM AEST
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| Do poems really have to ryhme, its not crappy, its what many people deal with daily and it makes perfect sense to me, and true, let it be what it is. Good write and thanks for posting it |
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Re: I cannot stay away
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by evilfairy on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 11:32:48 PM AEST
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| I don't think this is a crappy poem either. Poetry is not about the rhymes - it's about rhythm and pace and expression |
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Re: I cannot stay away
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by apollo on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 01:35:03 PM AEST
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this poem is beautiful. while some poem is about flow and rhyme, some poem is about expression. your expression in this poem captivates one's heart and mind, and that is what makes a wonderful poem. this was amazing.
brandon |
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