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Chemical Love
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
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Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 05:48:54 PM in AEST
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Never in a dream she comes,
living, loving, leaving.
Her sweat is a vapored elixir,
chemical love, sweet scent of her hair.
I cannot be without her,
without her eyes and her smile.
The way she looks in a towel after a hot shower,
or how it feels to hold her while she sleeps. She is the reason for life, she is my love.
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deadreckoning1983
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2004-06-08 17:48:54]
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Re: Chemical Love
(User Rating: 1 )
by Archie on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 05:39:02 PM AEST
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Some one gave you 3 stars on this poem. I think they were abit critical.
I watch a lot of movies and this poem reminds me of- (I hope this doesn't anger you) Golem's speech in the cave in the movie "The followship of the ring"
"It came to me, my love, my love my precious"
You are a very good writer and this poem brings back many movie memories. I look forward to reading more.
Your love is true for your companion that adds to the value of this poem greatly 5 stars |
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Re: Chemical Love
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by Ethereal_Engine on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 09:44:36 AM AEST
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| The line that caught my attention is "her sweat is a vapored elixir" What a great image of a woman shrouded in mist that heals all troubles completley like using an elixir of health in Final Fantasy lol. Very imaginative love poem. Nice job. |
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Re: Chemical Love
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by theMoth on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 05:02:48 PM AEST
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| You always use great words, and I like your experimentation. Anyone who likes a poem of yours should check out the rest. --Mothy |
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Re: Chemical Love
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 04:35:12 PM AEST
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| This is very touching and sweet. I like the images and descriptions of her, and the alliteration in the 2nd line is great. You seem like a real romantic. hehe. :) |
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