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Tangled Souls
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 01:38:04 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Wrap me in your arms for a while
Just hold me there
Silent
Bare
My heart exposed to you once more
I’m sobbing softly then
Falling
Again
As my teardrops crash onto your neck
Hearts begin to bleed
Secrets
Freed
Don’t let go until we come to know
Always and ever more
Stronger
Sure
I am whole and complete just then
Wrapped up in you
Forever
True
I know I belong there in your arms
It feels so right
Holding
Tight
Nothing will change or matter more
We’ve filled holes
Tangled
Souls
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2004-06-08 01:38:04] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by Living_In_My_Dream on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 01:50:23 AM AEST (User
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This is my first poem I think I have read by you...and I love it....I like the way you describe the feeling...It was a sweet poem...very powerful....full of emotion....I loved it
please comment and read some of my stuff id love to hear what you think...if you want that is....lol
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by holderofthestone on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 01:53:52 AM AEST (User
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very sweet. what an emotion to have.... forever sounds so lovely. great poem lovely.
A+++++ I really love this one |
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 02:18:22 AM AEST (User
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Powerfull, awesome, passionate, deep, healing.
smiles, thanks, peace,
emy |
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 02:23:28 AM AEST (User
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I really like the rhyme scheme here.
It sets it apart, and the sentiments expressed are lovely.
Nice write. |
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 05:38:27 AM AEST (User
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This is lovely, Hmmmm tangled souls, I love that expression, trully great poem, 5/5
pixie xx |
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 05:56:14 AM AEST (User
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I have never seen a poem structured quite like this before. It flows quite well, carries a unique rhyme scheme, and although it has nothing to do with the poem itself, it looks aesthetically pleasing written out.
"I am whole and complete just then
Wrapped up in you
Forever
True"
Beautiful sentiment, really captures the essence of the piece.
Freefalling with no parachute,
-V.S.
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by blueheart on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 06:37:27 AM AEST (User
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Its amazing that the single words add so much to the poem.
Wonderfully crafted.
Nothing will change or matter more
We’ve filled holes
Tangled
Souls
I especially liked those lines. |
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by MDodgen on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 11:50:13 AM AEST (User
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i love this style. really gets the point across. beautifully written. my favorite by you so far, but let me keep reading. good job again. wonderful imagery. |
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:14:00 AM AEST (User
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great style and flow, beautiful, well written and oh so sweet all wrapped up into a dear lovely poem:) hugs n' love, nessa
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Re: Tangled Souls
(User Rating: 1 ) by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 07:18:12 PM AEST (User
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The structure alone makes this an amazing piece. I loved it for is simplicity and yet admired its depth. This is one of your best. Thank you so much, SNM.
Lindsey |
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