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Before I Start To Need You
Contributed by
shadowdaughter
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Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 12:39:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
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this is not a cry for help.
we are not talking
because I need you--
we are talking
because you need to think I do
now, please, hon,
leave me here
alone
before I start to need you.
and I'm sorry
but there's nothing you can do
you can't wipe away my tears
beading in the crease of my eye
and trickling down my cheek
because
I'm really doubting that I can cry.
and you can't offer a listening ear
as I open up my heart to you
and spill out my soul
because
there's nothing for me to say.
and you can't let me lean on you
and make it all better
because
I know how it feels to support someone
and I need to stand on my own
and there's nothing you can do
to make it better.
and you can't lend a hand
to pick me up from where I've fallen
because
the pavement's looking pretty good
and (if I choose to get up at all)
I need to get up myself.
and you can't hug me tight
and tell me you'll always be here
because
I need to understand
how it feels to be alone
and hon, you won't always be here.
there is nothing at all you can do.
now leave. please.
do me that one favor.
before I start to need you . . .
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shadowdaughter
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by holderofthestone on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 12:48:48 AM AEST
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| wow great write. strong yet sad. A++++ |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 01:05:30 AM AEST
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Very good work here. As it's so hard these days to trust. A very powerfull write as I know I can relate.
gonna be a hit.
luv, smiles, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 02:25:58 AM AEST
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Wow, Nora...
Whats wrong? I know you dont need me... :) But if you want to talk at all, I'm around I swear!
Now this was an awesome poem. So raw and deep. The emotion and the heated feelings shine through, as they always do in all of your poetry. You are exceptional. Thank you so much for sharing.
Lindsey |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by carmen_queasy on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 02:37:18 AM AEST
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That was beautiful.
"And (if I choose to get up at all)
I need to get up myself"
That line is amazing.
"I need to understand
how it feels to be alone
and hon, you won't always be here"
I think this poem is amazing. |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 06:02:54 AM AEST
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Not sure what to say to this one...of course, it's stunningly written, but you are so good that my small compliments are not needed to reinforce that concrete fact.
I halfway agree that we all do not need somebody to lean on, but I do believe that we all need to get out our feelings and express them--we all need one person to listen at some point.
This is, all said, a stirring and emotional foray into the complex depths lying underneath a simple word--"need" Excellent and moving, remarkable and memorable.
Cornered in the lion's den,
-V.S. |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 06:34:26 AM AEST
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Powerful write, yet sad in essence.
I loved it. You showed real class here. |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 10:22:41 AM AEST
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um, i really dont know what to say to this...
except sorry.
strong write. very sad...
phil |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by Black13 on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 11:09:34 AM AEST
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Wow....
This was incredible Nora and though I'm afraid to ask I must.
Where did this one come from?
I loved it. It was perfect. :).... |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 03:25:15 PM AEST
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I've felt the same way Nora I love this poem very sad, emotive, and heartbreaking. I don't even know how to begin what I want to say... so I won't
bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 07:07:40 AM AEST
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Oh SD this poem simply took my breathe away!!!!BRAVO! TO YOU!
Written with much forethought, and the best part of all you have integrity! That's very rare today........I'm so glad you sent him on his way. Why is it almost everyone thinks a woman needs someone to lean upon, and when they do.......they are gone!
This is one of the best poems I've ever read!
Bravo to you again!
love
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by betty on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:04:28 AM AEST
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| Your style is very pleasing to read. Your strength is inspiring. Good poem. |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by betty on
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| Your style is very pleasing to read. Your strength is inspiring. Good poem. |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:22:21 PM AEST
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awwww beautifully sad, very moving:) hugs n' love, nessa
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by MoonlitAngel on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 03:36:22 AM AEST
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Holy crap, Nora. I LOVE this! And I know exactly what you mean... see, sometimes I understand you. lol. Too many times I haven't been able to cry (and that's when it hurts most), talking does not help, no one person can make it better (no matter what anyone says) and sometimes you just can't get up, but if you must, you must do it yourself. And you're right, there is no one person that will always be there. It's a sad fact, but a fact nonetheless. Everyone leaves and all love dies.
And needing people only makes you weak and stupid.
~ Dee |
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 12:55:01 AM AEST
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the pavement's looking pretty good
and (if I choose to get up at all)
I need to get up myself.
Wow. This entire piece is fabulous and the lines above are just perfection! I love the way you laid this out.... it is honest and uncluttered and, I think, conveys a feeling that many can relate to - including myself. I just wish it would so true....
*hugs*
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 06:45:40 PM AEST
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Very interesting poem that got me thinking whether or not I agree with you. You are wise in realizing that people can't always be there for you, and that sometimes, you will be alone, but it was hard for me to relate to, being that I never consider myself alone. (But we don't want to get into religion here). So, wise was this discovery, and you are not quite so naive as to think your "Honey" will always be there for you. But remember that friends are here to help us, and that sometimes we try to make ourselves stronger at the times when we need the help the most. I'll stop the rambling now. Good poem.
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Re: Before I Start To Need You
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by EternitysLyre on
Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 01:07:09 AM AEST
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Don't know why, this poem just suddenly drifted back to mind, and how it made me wonder the first time I read it. I swear, jumping between joy and depression so quickly can really drain the psyche.
Need I say more?
I miss you.
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