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Blurry
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 05:26:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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Which is better one or two?
Should I choose us? Or me? Or you?
I’m so dizzy, weak and small
But I’m sure you’d catch me should I fall
Alas!
Clearly I cannot choose the path in front of me
It’s too foggy
I could never choose the path in front of you
It’s too misty.
I can’t bear to take the path I see right now
It’s too hazy
I’m lost on these paths.
I’ve gone in search of myself
If I should return before I arrive
Ask me to wait.
If I stay lost
It’s too cloudy
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2004-06-07 17:26:59]
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Re: Blurry
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 05:44:09 PM AEST
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"If I should return before I arrive
Ask me to wait.
If I stay lost
It’s too cloudy"
very well written, your sense of being lost is very well described... good stuff.
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Re: Blurry
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by Tori on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 06:18:42 PM AEST
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| This is very good poetry it all flows very nicely! |
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