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I cant die
Contributed by
korax
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Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 06:16:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Opening the pages of time
Captured moments dance around my head
I still beg the question now
Why am I not dead?
Here I am 30 years of age
Yet still I'm ***** up
The devil didnt offer me a sip you see
He made me drink the cup
Decades pass people go
Yet I seem stuck on an endless road
Trying damn hard to get off this ride
Yet deep down I've lost all hope
What breaks me down then picks me up
Is a false willing to go on
The baron wastelands of my youth
Like hope have all long gone
Every 5 years or so
Hope brings a glimmer to my eyes
Yet like my demon I somehow mess this up
Inside my heart still cries
Friends, family all sell me out
That much I can see
The promising youth my grandparents adored
Is a broken man to me
Can I make my parents proud?
Will I do something that will make their hearts swell?
Or will I continue on the path I chose
And condemn them all to hell
I have lived almost half my life
Yet I have not amounted to much
A reversal of a Midas fortune
I break everything I touch
Now I look down at the road
Another chapter has ended
Truth now needs to be said
For too long I have pretended
So forgive me god and curse my sins
I do not want you to witness what I will do
But if I have any chance to meet my beloved again
Then I have to see this through
I've lost all hope, I've lost all faith
They did all this to me
But they never thought that this bastard would come back
That much they did not see
So I remove all that I care and love and embark there once again
To familiarise with the feelings that I love, death, fear and pain.
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korax
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Re: I cant die
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by pixie on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 06:52:23 AM AEST
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wow, this is amazing, brilliantly written, what more can I say 5/5
pixie xx |
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Re: I cant die
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by adanawa on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 09:57:30 AM AEST
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| Wow full of so much emotion, well done I hope everything goes well---octavia |
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Re: I cant die
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 04:20:41 PM AEST
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I enjoyed this read. I think you expressed yourself well, without falling into too simple a rhythym.
It felt a bit long, but it didn't keep me from finishing...
Nice job |
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Re: I cant die
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by nomie19877 on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 07:28:26 AM AEST
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Hey your poem is great
love the way you didnt repeat the things over and over you said them once and i think you only need to say them once
lovely read |
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Re: I cant die
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by nomie19877 on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 07:28:28 AM AEST
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Hey your poem is great
love the way you didnt repeat the things over and over you said them once and i think you only need to say them once
lovely read |
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Re: I cant die
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by nomie19877 on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 07:28:30 AM AEST
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Hey your poem is great
love the way you didnt repeat the things over and over you said them once and i think you only need to say them once
lovely read |
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Re: I cant die
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by emystar on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 01:05:25 AM AEST
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No, no, no u can't die!
Your power is in the pen.
since I read your first poem I'm still reading.
Embrace your pen my new found friend.
U have the ability to move people in a good way.
You've been to the pits of hell-n-back.
For a thirty year old u have remarkable talent!
I've been writing heavey since right before my Mom passed in 1979.
U have aan inner visin that most people ever live long enuff to see.
Please, keep breathing fire thru your pen!
luv, huggs, strength, hope,
emy |
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