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Snuff Film
Contributed by
brigitte7735
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Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 04:13:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Abandoned warehouse, obstructed views
Squalid splendor, debasement ensues
Nocturnal butcher elects his queen
Unparalleled talent in the obscene
Foolish supple siren, easy prey
Follows eager to the sinful soiree
Forboding aura, can't seem to detect
Illusive charm, can't seem to suspect
Lay on the mattress, camera turned on
Moans on cue, sanctimonious pawn
Tawdry spectacle, no self-esteem
Arrogant delusions, male supreme
Knife at her throat, such a pageantry
Exticated filth in his diabolatry
Orates defiantly his sweet goodbye
" Nymphomaniac, tonight you die "
Eerily she whisperd back... " I know "
Angelic looker, addicted to pain
Sordid seeker, escape the mundane
Needed a thrill, titillation strange
Uncannily provocative, slightly deranged
Flattery seduced her, stranger's appeal
Flair for sensing what he didn't reveal
Fiendish fetishes, born extremist
Impulsive desires never subsist
Lethal orgy of controversy
Medley of precarious artistry
Taunt and tease, walk the perilous line
Amateur thespian, let your gift shine
Knowledge of doom doesn't ease distress
Exhibitionist, cursed to impress
Transient pleasure, no longer deny
Whispered gleefully " Tonight you die "
Overcome with fear, she managed... " I know "
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brigitte7735
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2004-06-07 04:13:45]
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Re: Snuff Film
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 04:21:07 AM AEST
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"Taunt and tease, walk the perilous line
Amateur thespian, let your gift shine"
This was exquisitely drawn out. I've now read most of your work to date here, and am always impressed by the way you bring words to my attention in ways which are oft incisive and beautific.
Disturbing in its lasciviousness.
Well done, yet again. |
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Re: Snuff Film
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by Elena on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 05:40:05 AM AEST
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| Excellent verse on a horrifying reality. |
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Re: Snuff Film
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 03:15:47 AM AEST
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Whoa! Thats so friggin creey!
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Re: Snuff Film
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by Cancer on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 07:26:26 PM AEST
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wow. i usually hold a common grudge against scrawls that rhyme. even my own. but the rhyme didn't disrupt the flow or the story at all here. and the story itself was captivating.
ten bags of berry skittles to you.
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Re: Snuff Film
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by Vermillion on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 02:04:56 AM AEST
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very impressive and well thought out and so very captivating, well done
~vermillion~ |
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Re: Snuff Film
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by forever_lonely on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 07:40:16 PM AEST
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Most captivating, a welln thouught out and structured poem very emotive and powerful
I especially love the lines
''Taunt and tease, walk the perilous line
Amateur thespian, let your gift shine"
Perfection within these words is uncomprehendable
Luke
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