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Chasing Time
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 01:06:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Time ran away today
When our hands wrapped
Comfortably around each other
As I had hoped they would
We stopped counting then
The coming of each new dawn
And the number of times
That silly sun has fallen down
Yesterday and tomorrow
Collapsed gently into each other
Bound together like we were
As we held one another’s hand
The past rolled forward
As the future fell into place
And there was nothing more
Than that moment we shared
As days twist on into night
The crazy moon will come again
And we will be holding on still
Forever chasing time away
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Silent-No-More
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2004-06-07 01:06:47] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Chasing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by holderofthestone on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 01:33:20 AM AEST (User
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isnt it funny how some memories haunt us for ever? this is a deep read, and I relate completely. A+++++ |
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Re: Chasing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Elena on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 02:09:13 AM AEST (User
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Excellent personification of time. I like time being agile, which it is. Nothing to do with an old man!
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Re: Chasing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 04:14:41 AM AEST (User
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This is beautiful. I'm so drawn by the cuteness of these lines . . .
"And the number of times
That silly sun has fallen down"
I see the holiday had a positive effect.
This is a splendid poem. |
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Re: Chasing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by MDodgen on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 11:56:10 AM AEST (User
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i can relate to this poem completely. there are memories that stick with us the rest of our lives, and pop up when we least expect them. good write, beautiful wording, wonderful image. |
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Re: Chasing Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 07:19:56 PM AEST (User
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Memories. They can be the life or death of your soul. Sometimes memories of what has been lost are too unbearable. You spend all your time, chasing them away. This was beautifully written. You style shines through.
Lindsey |
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