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Crime Of Passion
Contributed by
pixie
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Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 11:49:21 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Here I found you with her in my bed,
In my opinion you both were already dead,
The smell of sex still lingered in the air,
As I witnessed you both laying there.
You both begged and pleaded with me,
I’m not a fool it’s plain enough for me to see,
That you have committed the ultimate betrayal,
You made love in my bed, now it is MY turn to make you both wail.
“ It’s not what you think” you begin to cry,
I want to scream back but my mouth is too dry,
I can feel the anger welling up inside,
Washing over me like a very rough tide.
I remove the gun from my pocket,
My adrenalin is soaring like a bonfire night rocket,
The look on your faces make me laugh,
You really don’t know how much you’ll feel my wrath.
You’re both begging me to let you see another day,
I think I’ll shoot you’re whore first as she got in loves way,
Or shall I kill you first as you were meant to be my lover,
Who played away and gave himself to another.
I load my deadly weapon and take my aim,
This sort of getting blown away won’t feel quite the same,
My rage takes over the gun goes off in my hand,
It screams and whistles and lets out an almighty bang
The first shot hits her square in the chest,
But I have spared you for second my love ,any last requests?
Now come the tears and all of your bull*****,
My second and last bullet was a perfect and well aimed hit.
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pixie
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2004-06-06 11:49:21]
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Re: Crime Of Passion
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by Whisper on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 01:32:31 PM AEST
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Well other then being glad your really not that way. :-) The words you chose were pretty graphic .It did take the reader up and down thought wise . Nice write ..point made.
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Re: Crime Of Passion
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 01:32:47 PM AEST
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| Wow. That was a really powerful poem. I could really feel the anger. The scene was very clearly painted in my mind. Terrific job. |
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Re: Crime Of Passion
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by screwup on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 04:28:28 PM AEST
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| Wow Pixie... your poems sease to inspire me. I really like this one as sad and angry as it seems. You can pm me if you want. |
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Re: Crime Of Passion
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by KSUHO11 on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 04:31:48 PM AEST
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| I've never gone through that as well, but your captured the emotions and feelings that I would imagine one would be feeling in that type if situation. Pimp tight. |
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