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the last beat of our collective heart
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:28:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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(two paths
once one
grown so far apart
finally come to their end
hollow sound
last beat
of our collective heart
never to beat as one again)
it wasn't supposed to be this way
things like this aren't supposed to end
but here we stand
fingers falling away
not giving up
not letting go
just moving on in tears
I never meant to hurt you
I hope you understand
I leave because I love you
and don't want to hurt you again
I know that you are angry
and you have every right to be
and I can't even blame you
if you finally hate me
please don't cry, don't think of it as leaving
I’m just setting you free
giving you the chance to find someone better
and be as happy as you deserve to be
and even as I walk away
I’ll leave my heart with you
I’ll never bring you anything but pain
so I’ll leave because I love you
(those paths are slowly fading
finally come to their end
and silence is the only sound
as hearts weep softly, all alone
never to beat as one again)
Copyright ©
Cancer
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2004-06-04 20:28:37]
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Re: the last beat of our collective heart
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by poetrygodslove on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:37:34 PM AEST
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beautiful but very sad as well.
I can feel the love for the one left.
hope the two get back together and work things out. when two people really love eachother. they will argue. ... good write. sandy |
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Re: the last beat of our collective heart
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:44:35 PM AEST
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I loved the ability to express the emotion in this poem - the rythym came and went, but perhaps that adds to the free flow.
Nice job |
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Re: the last beat of our collective heart
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by Archie on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:46:31 PM AEST
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| Wow such an awesome and sad poem. Life sometimes can be a tragic irony. |
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Re: the last beat of our collective heart
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by MnMnMsrcool on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:50:06 PM AEST
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| Wow that was such a good poem...i loved it and it was so sad great job...keep writing |
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Re: the last beat of our collective heart
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by Ina on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 12:06:40 AM AEST
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The intro and the epilogue in the all too fashionable () was a great touch. I mean it rocked my keyboard. Absolutly emotion grabbing. I read it with eyelifds plastered to the screen.
I need to send you a message. |
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Re: the last beat of our collective heart
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by brigitte7735 on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 02:13:18 PM AEST
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Real sad, sorry things are not so great.
Beautifully contradictory
Always,
Vanessa |
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