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my submission
Contributed by
holderofthestone
on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:17:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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An evil thought is calling me
to an evil land, where the blind can see
with death and plauge surrounding fear
the tears are abundant, they hold me near
to deep to grasp, to scarce find
the answers in my searing mind
I look for a light, searching for my way
I try with all my might, every single day
I use all my insight, yet have no words to say
I yell with all my might, "why must I obey?"
so now ive given up,ill let him have my soul
there no point in fighting, I never had control
so if my wrists are bleeding,pay me no attention
its just me giving in, my way out called submission...
Copyright ©
holderofthestone
... [
2004-06-04 20:17:55]
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Re: my submission
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by TheVoice on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:48:56 PM AEST
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very interesting write.
the voice
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Re: my submission
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by InnerBeautyQueen on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 09:19:23 PM AEST
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| !!! wow !!! very very good. VERY good |
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Re: my submission
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 09:22:03 PM AEST
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| your writing style in handling this piece was very impressive. hopefully soon you will not be submitting to the thoughts that tell you to do such things. but we do what me must to live dont we? |
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Re: my submission
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 06:29:02 PM AEST
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wow, very deep I liked this one a lot...a whoel lot...something just about it...I dont know I loved it...greay write...Im speechless in words to say
much love,
Dani |
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Re: my submission
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by SweetRhythm on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:35:24 AM AEST
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Very intense moving poem. Good to see you never gave up & continued sharing your wonderful sentiments with us all. Though this poem is dark & negative, its a real good write & its clear to the reader you've given it all you've got.
Corinna |
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