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Gameplay
Contributed by
wray
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Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 10:50:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Young love.
A love of light between their years
A love of tears
To show no fear she loves his light
He loves her tears
A motion slight to cool her fears.
White dreams
Crackle in a crystal glow
Sweet suffering
The dreams she holds.
His breathless one.
A love of woes to heal her pain
A love of shame
To keep them sane she loves her throes
He loves her shame
But no one knows they play this game.
Copyright ©
wray
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2004-06-03 22:50:48]
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Re: Gameplay
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 11:22:46 PM AEST
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| dark adn sadistic, just the way i like my poetry. YOu've great talent here, I can't wait to read more. |
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Re: Gameplay
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by Black13 on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 11:49:40 PM AEST
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Wonderful write.
I can't even begin to guess what brought this one on.
Nice write though.
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Re: Gameplay
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by Butterat_Zool on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 02:37:57 AM AEST
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| What a great form here! It creates a really strong effect in this poem, breaking apart the sentences. The words you use are kind of vague too, which gives the poem a real ethereal sort of dream-like quality. The reverence of pain is always a fun topic, and despite the sad subject matter, it almost gives the poem a comfortable, pleasant feel... Reading this felt a lot like driving over a whole bunch of speed bumps, like in a parking lot, but with a sort of warm pleasantness to it that speed bumps just don't have. Keep it up! I want to see more! Butterat Zool. |
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Re: Gameplay
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by holderofthestone on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 03:33:00 AM AEST
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| you have a unique style. another great poem!!! A++++ |
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