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Pursue The Poem
Contributed by
Hannah_Heaven
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Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 04:57:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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useless words
brought together by useless people
writing in ryhme to show their feelings
waste of time waste of space
i cannot find another place
that abandons this type of absurd behaviour
am i the only one who can see?
that other lines and sentences are just a waste of a life time
say them out loud you will be heard better
whos gonna notice the lil depressed poet
the lil abused girl in the corner
with the shadows in her eyes
and covering her like a night sky
the longest word and most meaningful
would only have to be POEM
long as you want
doesnt have to be really saying anything
just holding your feelings better than a mum
a person is just a body skin bones
no big deal
like a computer no answering back
just storage system
open
reopen
close
open
reopen
delete
forget
save.........
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2004-06-03 16:57:28]
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Re: Pursue The Poem
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 05:06:57 PM AEST
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An Interesting, albeit slightly confusing work.
"i cannot find another place
that abandons this type of absurd behaviour"
I was lost by that line, but was amused and enlightened by others, such as your people/computer analogy.
Thanks for writing. |
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Re: Pursue The Poem
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by Archie on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 05:23:12 PM AEST
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| Okay, that poem was interesting, if that is how you feel why do you post your poems here? I really want to know, I post my poems here even though I have a music writing contract for the enjoyment and edification of those who would read them. I am curious about you. |
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Re: Pursue The Poem
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by alasdaircairns on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 05:43:30 PM AEST
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Mute, mute,
Does not compute.
Better stay in bed,
Can't report the truth.
Cos some girl says,
We're missing the route,
Time to switch off and Reboot,
Cute?
Made me laugh though :)
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Re: Pursue The Poem
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 06:56:51 PM AEST
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I think some of this tried to hard, but I liked the effort, clever theme.
Some nice phrasing, and I see it brought a few comments as well. Way to go. |
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