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Shattered Ice
Contributed by
shanarah
on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 01:04:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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My confused mind, impossible patients,
encircled by ice.
Dreams of tragedy and visions of evil,
I compose.
Willpower and strength you entrust,
chipping my glacial boundary.
Your perseverance shatters the ice,
and there you stand,
rolling me into paradise.
Freezing the sweetness of time,
restoring my wounds,
guarding me with stillness,
unmasking beauty,
allowing my earth to bloom.
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shanarah
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2004-06-03 13:04:26] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Shattered Ice
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vitreous_Soul on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 05:14:36 AM AEST (User
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I absolutely love the ice/frost metaphor, as it's used to good effect throughout (with lines like "chipping my glacial boundary," and "Your perseverance shatters the ice"). Also, it makes a good point that lowering one's walls is not always a bad thing. Stellar work, I have to give you five stars here.
Stabbed in the heart with a blade of ice,
-V.S. |
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