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When My Daddy Hung Himself
Contributed by
Vermillion
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Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 05:56:49 AM in AEST
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standing on the basement floor
mounting tears in my eyes
when my daddy hung himself
i didnt get to say goodbye
after mommy overdosed
and we were all that was left
when my daddy hung himself
he saw her after his death
maybe he couldnt deal
maybe it was me all along
when my daddy hung himself
i sat down and wrote this song
choking on his own flesh
the veins swelling in his face
when my daddy hung himself
severing his spinal cords base
i kicked the stool from under him
i stand here an orphaned child
when my daddy hung himself
well,it gave me a smile :)
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by krisseee on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 06:10:52 AM AEST
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 07:38:03 AM AEST
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| Woah! I wasn't expecting THAT ending! lol. But it was a really good poem. You conveyed the many different emotions well. |
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by Britty on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 08:45:35 AM AEST
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Hey! Wow. That was extreamly emotional and truly sad. This was a very good poem and you expressed yourself very good. Your almost like me. When my dad killed himself, I never got to say goodbye. I thought that it was me that he didnt love anymore, or couldnt handle, so he just left and didnt saygood bye. Im so sorry this happend to you. GOOD POEM
Britty |
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by BlackFire9786 on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 10:15:08 AM AEST
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wow, i love the ending! Reading through the poem it seems like you're so sad about it and then at the end, you wanted it. Awesome. I really like this, great way to twist the poem around. Keep writing!
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by pixie on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 11:23:47 AM AEST
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wow, talk about a twist in the tale, great stuff, very very powerful.
pixie xx |
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by brigitte7735 on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 02:18:41 PM AEST
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hehehe always nice
Vanessa |
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by shorty_52 on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 02:50:02 PM AEST
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good twist. i liked it. hope it's not true but i really liked the poem. keep up the good work. i'll look forward to reading more of ur stuff!!
~allyson~ |
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by Naughtygurl on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 12:51:10 PM AEST
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| my friend britty is obsseseive her father didn't kill himself he had cancer but stilll its a sad story.... SHes right i'm sorry about your loss I really hope this poem was just a poem not a true story... Nice twist.... Good Poem |
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Re: When My Daddy Hung Himself
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by assassinatorgirl on
Tuesday, 29th November 2005 @ 07:37:16 PM AEST
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| meep. good job with that description, left a lot of saliva in my mouth...i'm not sure why, lol. |
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