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Hell
Contributed by
willow_tara72002
on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 03:25:54 PM in AEST
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DarkPoetry
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The darkness devours me
AS i stand in my living hell
Death is like heaven if i imagine it
A flame no where is lit
All is dark and meek
Im standing, being the freak
My life is hell
Which i belong
For all the things i've done wring
Hell so dark, tormenting and pain
That the devils themselves do tremble at its hate
Hell so much more
Than the one in the core
My soul has been tore
For if i should die by suicide
The hell I'll endore, wont be sore
Hell of the afterlife is heaven
Hell in light
Not covered in darkness and pain
My life is hell
Far worse than hell itself
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Re: Hell
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by alecfernadez on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 03:27:12 PM AEST
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| I liked this, exspecially the last 2 lines, that really tied it off perfectly |
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Re: Hell
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 04:11:41 PM AEST
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That was a pretty dark poem. Sometimes it seems like this world is a living hell, but if you're going to heaven, then this is the closest to hell that you are ever going to get. The part in your poem about suicide just made me think of this quote I heard, "Suicide is a permanent solution to a temporary problem." Hope life looks up for you.
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Re: Hell
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 07:34:05 PM AEST
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very good poem I didn't agree with some things u said in your poem but it definitely was very well written and I can empathize with you what it is like to feel like crap.
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