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(Time) My Personal War
Contributed by
Joker17
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Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 08:32:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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There’s ten million words that I want to write
And sometimes I don’t care if they rhyme
As long as it just feels good to me
And it’s helping me to pass the (Time).
‘Cause (Time) will be a “cause of death” for me
Each day we don’t share the same home
So I’m sitting here now, all by myself
And I’m missing you, as I write this poem.
I’ve grown strong enough to make it through
And I love you so much, I can wait
It’s just hurts me deep, this being apart
I just want to get our lives straight.
Thank God I am back to working again
That kills at least eight hours a day
Then driving erases, another hour more
Leaves me fifteen, to write and to pray.
I’m hoping that both, will keep my alive
Until we’re back together once more
If I could just sleep for some of that (Time)
Then (Time) wouldn’t be My Personal War.
Copyright ©
Joker17
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2004-06-01 20:32:05]
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Re: (Time) My Personal War
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by Ina on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 08:56:44 PM AEST
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| Do you know how great that first stanza is? Millions of words...thats great and I am so glad you didnt rhyme. The (time) in parenthesis was very original. This poem was clean clear and very memorable. |
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Re: (Time) My Personal War
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by brigitte7735 on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 09:23:38 PM AEST
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oooooo
thats beautiful, damn i feel ya, counting the hours, just killing time
On a side note i always love your authors notes.. because thats how i feel right now, that when im with Dan, its like time stands still
Best of luck
Vanessa |
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Re: (Time) My Personal War
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by Princesaazul16 on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 08:39:09 AM AEST
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This is a very strong and deep poem. Keep up the good work. I loved it! Hope to hear more.
~Stace~ |
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Re: (Time) My Personal War
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 10:58:32 PM AEST
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| time is a double edge sword. it can create or destroy. |
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