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Death and Life of a Leaf
Contributed by
morelikelyrics
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Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:09:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Sometimes, I admire the leaves, the way they just rustle in the wind,
Effortlessly lounging on long breaths of air, with a greenish tint,
Such a relaxed life it seems... simply swaying in the breeze,
They grow, and bloom, bringing forth signs of a better season, and year,
And later on they fall, they crowd to the floor, and lie lifeless with fear,
Afraid to never see such beautiful sights their eyes had once seen,
Afraid to never sway and rustle, and play among the trees,
However, their fear is what holds such rank, as it rots them from inside,
And slowly they fade, with winter drawing near, underground they hide,
Awaiting there, for summer anew, the leaves patiently forever sleep,
And their remains leave forth, the fertile stimulation, for future blossoms' needs...
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Re: Death and Life of a Leaf
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by Ina on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:15:13 PM AEST
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I really like the imagery you portray here, but i wish you put this more in a poetic form.
shorter lines instead of a paragraph
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very sensitive piece. |
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Re: Death and Life of a Leaf
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by arden on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 05:48:19 PM AEST
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wow..... i LOVED the imagery in this.
wow i truly am speechless. just amazing. i loved every word. greatly, perfectly done.
Arden |
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Re: Death and Life of a Leaf
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by Geykya on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 03:03:24 PM AEST
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| Although this poem brings wonderful personification it is strangely written. The lines are too long to rhyme yet they do which brings a sinsongy ackwardness to the read. Sometimes we have a tendency to use to many words to describe something so complex. Still a great write tho. |
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