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Barefoot on Broken Ground
Contributed by
jt
on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 07:23:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I try to hold onto your voice through the dark
But your sorrowful song
that is so cold to touch
Slips from my grasp and I fall
I fall from you
From a world I once knew
Now I cannot hear your call
And your sorrowful song
that once hurt me so much
Has taken my will, extinguished my spark
I fall to a place where I will not be found
And I wait on my own
For this pain to just end
Still I remember your face
I call for you
For the world I once knew
To come get me from this place
Could my life still be
the same if I just pretend
You didn’t leave me here
Barefoot on broken ground
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jt
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2004-06-01 07:23:56]
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Re: Barefoot on Broken Ground
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by bernard on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 07:28:36 AM AEST
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Good but rather sad poem. I enjoyed my read.
bernard. |
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Re: Barefoot on Broken Ground
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by Avarice_Riot on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 07:32:36 AM AEST
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| Very sad but thoroughly enjoyable to read, there was a good flow from beginning to end and the emotion in it shines. Well done. |
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Re: Barefoot on Broken Ground
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by Princesaazul16 on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 02:23:29 PM AEST
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Nice job, I liked it alot. It's very deep and strong. Keep up the good work.
~Stace~ |
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