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I know it's the end....so just keep quiet please
Contributed by
lilred_2009
on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 09:20:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I sat by my window.
waiting for you,
to drive by,
like you used to,
but the street was silent,
deserted,
and everything a round me,
was violently inverted.
everywhere was pain,
as we drove home in the rain,
i realized too fast,
that this drive,
was 'our' last.
so many tears,
facing our fears,
'i'll see you someday.'
and we parted way
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lilred_2009
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2004-05-31 21:20:51]
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Re: I know it's the end....so just keep quiet please
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by TheVoice on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 09:39:07 PM AEST
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I liked the write, but it left me with questions. Was it a final ending or just a break up? Good job.
The Voice
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Re: I know it's the end....so just keep quiet please
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by evilfairy on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 01:08:00 AM AEST
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I so know that feeling.... :-(
I liked the style of your poem....simple lines, simple words - makes that simple, honest emotion show through... |
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Re: I know it's the end....so just keep quiet please
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by Archie on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 04:26:56 PM AEST
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| This is a sad poem but a good one full of feelings that I myself am in touch with. |
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Re: I know it's the end....so just keep quiet please
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 04:40:25 PM AEST
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Touching and simple. And I like the rhyme. This is good!
Take care.
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Re: I know it's the end....so just keep quiet please
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 01:30:06 AM AEST
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Great poem... I am sad for you. Knowing what your last moment is must've hurt. Well, great poem...
Jodi |
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