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Painted Woman
Contributed by
brigitte7735
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Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 09:22:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Painted woman, pornographic little darling
Answer the nice man when he holds you down
Icicle tongue, that yet somehow still stings
Nauseating touch, sickly sweet caramal brown
Trust us he loves you, the way he knows how
Exclaims it most when he holds you down
Drunk in his lust, wipes the sweat from his brow
Wallows in the way he pushes you around
Omnipotent entity, that's what he thinks he is
Married you only so he could hold you down
Answer him, you're nothing , no one's but his
Never again will you dare mutter a sound
Copyright ©
brigitte7735
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2004-05-29 21:22:42]
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Re: Painted Woman
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by reprobate on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 09:29:47 PM AEST
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tragic and painful. abuse comes in so many forms. hope this is so fictional.
many thanks for this |
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Re: Painted Woman
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by matingcrow on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 10:48:04 PM AEST
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Hey reprobate thanks for writing. Your comments are OK
Nice acrostic. Put his name in next time.
Really, unique.
Fine artistically structured treament.
Readable unsmpathetic.
Forgetem after reasoning. |
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Re: Painted Woman
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by pixie on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 08:41:21 AM AEST
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This is very sad... I too hope that this is just a great write,
takecare,
Pixie xx |
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Re: Painted Woman
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by Ina on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 03:25:12 PM AEST
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| I will not comment on the topic but your style of writing. It is very original. I love the first line! I just want to use it somewhere! lol. The fact that there is no period at the end makes this poem so much more meaningful! |
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Re: Painted Woman
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by morelikelyrics on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 11:08:27 PM AEST
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ugh... I'm not sure I can take much more of this...
Now dont get me wrong, this poem was tragically wonderful in it's entirety, but it seems that so many today are filled with such beautiful sorrow, including myself.
Please keep up your inspiring, and incredible writes. but please, for the sake of everyone's emotional distress, think happy thoughts! |
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Re: Painted Woman
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by TheVoice on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 09:45:39 PM AEST
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reading between the lines shows such pain. my heart reaches out to you.
the voice
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Re: Painted Woman
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 03:10:18 AM AEST
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Very interesting.
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Re: Painted Woman
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by forever_lonely on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 06:55:19 PM AEST
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Speechless again, very parental advisory, i could see your wanting to openly write your heart on the subject, your words jumped out of the page and into my soul, very emotive and powerful words,
Great use of technical brilliance here, pleanty of onomatopeaic words which makes for gorgeous poem, though this one has a much darker painting to it
Luke |
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