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TRUE BRITT
Contributed by
msnider
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Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 07:42:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
PetPoems
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Muscles rippling
Tail held high
Head is lifted t’ward the sky.
Coat a’shining
Beauty seen
In this healthy being, so pristine.
Eyes a’hunting
Nose awake
Searching for the bird she’ll take.
She moves in slowly
Quiet too,
A hundred feet or so will do.
She stops stock still
Paw raised in air
Poised there like a signal flare.
Tightly focused
Mind in tune
The hunters will be coming soon.
Birds a’scatter
Guns ignite
There’ll be pheasant for dinner tonight!
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msnider
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2004-05-29 19:42:22] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: TRUE BRITT
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 09:24:42 PM AEST (User
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Great imagery.. Now I'm hungry!!!
Jenni |
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Re: TRUE BRITT
(User Rating: 1 ) by Cole on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:36:34 AM AEST (User
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Good images and good flow. I'd complain about the rhyming, but it actually worked will to give it the sort of flow this poem needed. I can just see her outside hunting. Good work!
-Nichole-
P.S. - A review from you as a return of the favor would be much appreciated. |
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Re: TRUE BRITT
(User Rating: 1 ) by thumper on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 06:05:06 AM AEST (User
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This was a great write! I am not happy with the idea of dog hunting birds but what the hey!! I don't like any killing of anything! You put this so succinctly it rings with truth! And I accecpt the fact that animals have to be hunted. Good write!Thumps ; 0 ) |
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