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pieces
Contributed by
Luinil
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Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 06:40:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The world breathed me intact
They all steal pieces of me
Earth swallows them into life
She takes her chastising pieces
She strives to replace the parts she’s lost
The hole is bigger than I can fill
His pieces are forgotten
Dark and black and barren
He gave them away without remorse
You ripped away pieces of me
You let me bleed into the air
You threw them away and they believed
I am diminished
I can’t find the pieces
I left my blood everywhere
If you take any more I’ll fall apart
I will melt into life again
Copyright ©
Luinil
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2004-05-28 18:40:22]
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Re: pieces
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by full_blur on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 06:47:08 PM AEST
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excellent write.
Your descriptions are powerful and disturbing. This piece is going to haunt me for a while! |
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Re: pieces
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by liquidsunshine on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 06:55:51 PM AEST
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A wonderful write. A word to describe it?
Eerie.
Good though, I liked it.
Bravo and encore!!!
Love,
Chelsea |
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Re: pieces
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by Brians_Sweety on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 07:42:12 PM AEST
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Oh my goodness, great poem, very powerful, very touching. I can't say in words how great this is. Thank you for sharing.
Stephanie |
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