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Someday
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 05:26:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Someday I’ll leave and I’ll scarcely look back
I’ll get on a train that goes down the right track
I’ll go and I’ll make a good name for myself
I’ll no longer watch from a dusty old shelf
I’ll get to move on and I’ll get to be free
I’ll never remember the things that I’ll flee
I’ll run from this place, the restraints and the “No’s
I’ll get to love life again, feel how it flows
I’ll be very happy with well-deserved freedom
I’ll have fewer worries—that’s great! I don’t need ’em!
Someday when I’m able, I’ll get out of here
And I’ll learn to teach music that pleases my ear
And once I make money, enough I will pay
And I’ll own a brick building to house my café
And I’ll have open mic night with plenty of talent
And I’ll be an owner so fun and so gallant
And someone will hear me one night when I sing
And they’ll make me a deal and up for it I’ll spring
And then I’ll make money for singing my song
And won’t ev’ryone think on how they were wrong?
Someday from this place I will simply desert
I won’t ever go back, no I’ll never revert
I won’t be this lonely forgotten misfit
I won’t have to long for a fire to be lit
I won’t be alone every Friday date night
I won’t wonder if I’ll receive an invite
I won’t be alone and I won’t be outcast
I won’t have to feel the harsh pains of my past
I won’t be the one who just watches the fun
Someday I'll be someone known now by no one.
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liquidsunshine
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2004-05-27 17:26:02]
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Re: Someday
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by Juliet on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 05:49:47 PM AEST
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| I really like this. It has a lot of thought in it. I love how almost every line in the first stanza begins with "I'll", and second one is "And", and the thrid is "I". It kept the beat. The only time a line doesn't begin with those words is when it says "Someday." Good! |
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Re: Someday
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by Archie on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 06:08:30 PM AEST
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| Two things come to mind when I read this poem, the first is a country song called "My next 50 years, the second is my own childhood and how close I am to achieving my dreams. I really do hope the best for me, when you have your kareoke party I will come over and sing for you. That's a promise! |
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Re: Someday
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 06:46:04 PM AEST
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That's the spirit! Your deepest dream is the path laid out for you. It is up to you to take it. A blessing upon your journey!
Andrew |
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Re: Someday
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by full_blur on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 06:51:00 PM AEST
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| wow. I feel like this sometimes, you describe the dreams of the lonely in a breathtaking manner! |
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Re: Someday
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by eatfresh22 on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:41:49 PM AEST
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That was so refreshing. I admire your ambition. Not enough people in the world have dreams today, but I'm glad that you do. I'm excited for you now, to be able to fulfill all of the things you want to do. Such talent you have in making your dreams a poem. Good luck!
~Carrie~ |
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