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Death And The Immortal
Contributed by
Vermillion
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Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 07:26:51 AM in AEST
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Death And The Immortal
i once was a man
the best soldier in Bethlehem
then i got a little older
our world got a little colder
keep in mind this was a long time ago
before the dark ages,before the world war show
i was a roman guard,it was my birth right
im the man who crucified the one you call christ
after i realized what i had done
realizing i just killed our gods son
i couldnt live with myself anymore
my pain was rooted down to the core
so i took a knife to my throat
then i saw a figure in a long black coat
my wounds began to clot
as the world around me stopped
she called herself 'angel D'
whatever thats supposed to mean
she said because of my sins id have to dwell
in the fiery depths of a place called hell
she said she could take away all my pain
if i did whatever she said whenever she came
seeing how i had nothing to loose
heh,how could i refuse
it seems she wanted me to do what i do best
and thats to kill and put the victims to rest
i asked why she wanted me to kill again
she stood there quietly and slowly grinned
'as powerful as i am,some still escape my grasp'
'their spirits hide from me just like lowly rats'
'you are an excellent killer, indeed you are a keeper'
'so let them know that nobody...nobody cheats the reaper'
so i was to be deaths right hand man
she promised me immortality as she spilt my hour glass sand
i cannot be killed i can never die
she said 'as long as your by my side'
so began my century campaign
of making all those hidden souls pay
til one night i was out on a mission
i remembered the day of the crucifixion
i had to kill a little girl with her eyes sewn shut
shivering in the corner of her parents hut
i asked my master if i had to kill this girl on her knees
master replied 'yes,because of what she sees'
'she can see the future of man and this pathetic race'
'she has even seen my true face'
'she warns other of my coming near'
'if you know where i am,whats there to fear?'
'she cant be allowed to live, those souls are harder to track down'
'she been warning everyone in this god forsaken town'
im sorry master i cant fulfil your task
im sorry ive failed you on my second chance
'how could you do this to me'she said 'havent i been good to you?'
yes you have master i dont know what id do without you
'i could of had anyone...anyone in this world'
then i watched master brutally murder that girl
she turned to me and said 'now its your turn to die'
but how can i go on without you i cried
she said 'you wont' then slashed her sickle down upon me
then darkness was all i could see
i saw heaven,then i saw hell
i saw places ive never seen before, a never ending tale
then i woke up i was in my hometown
how could this be i asked as i looked around
many centuries have passed since that faithful night
looking back you know angel D was right
i truly am immortal and can never die
not by my masters swift hand even if she tried
so i sit here growing older and older
as our world gets colder and colder
i still see master time to time
sitting on my bench she joins me by my side
she hasnt aged a day shes as beautiful as ever
she turns to me and says 'i bet you think your clever'
'your the only man who has escaped my hand'
'and its by a spell of my command'
i lay my head on her shoulder to rest
heh, im the man who has cheated death
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Vermillion
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Re: Death And The Immortal
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by poetrygodslove on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 07:36:06 AM AEST
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I don't know what to say. part of me wants to preach to you and tell you about GOD'S LOVE. the other part of me says you already know.
this poem is something else. first of all it took me back to the story about the guard being upset. didnt know it was going to end like this. but I know the devil can use people to do his crime as he promises many things but at the end all are thrown into hell. him along with the ones he decieved. good good write. you have a talent. sandy |
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Re: Death And The Immortal
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by SugimotoYouki on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 08:06:53 AM AEST
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wonderful story put in well chose words..
congratualtions on a good piece of work |
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Re: Death And The Immortal
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by HellsLibrarian on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 08:52:09 AM AEST
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| Dude, that was so awesome. I loved it. Great story. |
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Re: Death And The Immortal
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by shorty_52 on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 08:44:26 PM AEST
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good. long. and very interesting. but really long like most of ur stuff. it's really good and has a good punch line.:D keep up the good work.
~allyson~ |
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Re: Death And The Immortal
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by ChinaRivera on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 12:22:32 AM AEST
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| That was nice! You're very talented. I loved that story. Were all good for some kind of work in this universe, arent we? ;-) Keep up the good work vermillion. Peace & Love -China Rivera AkA Shorty Jewlz |
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Re: Death And The Immortal
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by assassinatorgirl on
Tuesday, 29th November 2005 @ 06:57:51 PM AEST
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| that was absolutely the epitome of awesomeness in a story. wow. i'm sitting here, my mouth is open, it's sooo good!!! i dont know how you do it. heh, for some reason my mind started turning it romantic as it does everything, i can just imagine them loving each other in a strange way. i relaly like how you use "heh" it reminds me of my love and it suits the poem so well, i like the character you specifically chose, and i love when he rests his head on her shoulder, that's my favorite part. ^__^ |
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