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Losing a Friend
Contributed by
Colleen
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Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 08:37:48 PM in AEST
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SadPoetry
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Why are you acting like someone you're not
this mascarade has got to stop
Through your tainted smile
I can see nothing but denial
You've peirced my heart
with your dirty dart
Too blind to see the bleeding
you keep on proceeding
I see you searching for yourself
I hope you're not too late or else
Your screams are silent
but your fury is violent
You are so trapped inside
you can't break this cage even if you tried
I scream and plead with you
but you just pass right through
I mean nothing
but I use to be something
Something to you
I was a friend that was true
A friend who was true
once told you
You can do anything
just keep on believing
But you lost hope
you feel so broke
I just want you to know
it's okay to have your true emotions show
Copyright ©
Colleen
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2004-05-23 20:37:48]
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Re: Losing a Friend
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 08:45:13 PM AEST
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another fine poem, heartfelt and very moving, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Losing a Friend
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 09:02:16 PM AEST
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you tell em Colleen!
nicely written |
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Re: Losing a Friend
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by LOWMAN613 on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 10:36:04 PM AEST
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| Welcome! This was too the point & well done! Christina |
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Re: Losing a Friend
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by Geykya on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 09:48:31 PM AEST
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| Your poetry is very direct. I like the fact that yu dont try to hide yur word behing complex metaphors and sybols. Altho sometimes I can't quite catch the rythem in yur poems, so to me some of them don't flow. Then agin I've always been a bit odd. Luv yur work. *Geykya* |
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Re: Losing a Friend
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd March 2006 @ 08:50:22 AM AEST
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A little hard to catch the rhythm but I feel this is lack of understanding by me. I am sure if you read this I would completely see it. Overall not a bad job at all. In fact, it is quite good.
- SCM |
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