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Suicide God
Contributed by
pyrofungus
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Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 08:11:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Bow your heads in decline
I mustn’t see your shiny faces
Hold that grin
Or I’ll smack it away
See me now
I know your weakness
I can see it in your eyes
The fear as you stare
The chill in the air
The cry in your veins
I feel it all
Watch me stare
Watch the glare
Watch me sacrifice you
From within
Bleeding from your soul
Bleeding from your mind
You can’t take it anymore
You just can’t!
You must end it all!
I feel you so you can!
I watched you tie the rope to the beam
I watched you stand on the chair
I watched you as the rope slipped over your head
I was the one that encouraged you to go through with it
And kick the chair aside!
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Re: Suicide God
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by Nickibabe421 on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 09:59:01 PM AEST
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| awsome poem! ive been there so many times. |
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Re: Suicide God
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by pixie on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 07:44:12 AM AEST
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Great and powerful poem, but also sad that you feel this way .
takecare
Pixie xx |
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Re: Suicide God
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by creed on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 06:40:39 PM AEST
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| the poem is good...yet very odd. though i do like it. |
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Re: Suicide God
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by shrunkin_fool34142316 on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 12:59:01 AM AEST
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| I like the poem i have been there soooooooooo many times......huh..... but i wouldn't really call it suicide god..there is only one god & he is great |
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Re: Suicide God
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by SuicideParty on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 08:18:31 PM AEST
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Nice. Very nice. Have you ever heard of Vendetta Red? If you haven't, you should look for them. They're awesome! They have a song called 'Por Vida', it's about God abandoning his children and leaving them to err and sin and be damned.
Very good song. Incredible poem! I loved it. Nice expressions, though hanging seems like it'd be a bit too...drawn out for my tastes. I tend to lean toward guns, knives, and poison when I write about suicide. Great use of words, and the descriptions were wonderful. All in all, it was totally sick...I like that.
~Sam |
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