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Unnoticed
Contributed by
DirtyFool
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Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 06:50:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The pain I feel is so unreal,
I try so hard not to care about you,
But my efforts are useless,
I love you to much to forget you,
Just thinking about you hurts me,
Then how can it be,
You don't even notice me,
If I told you that I loved you,
Would you notice me then,
If I told you how much I cared for you,
Would you notice me then,
Or is it just an endless chase,
That I can never win,
I think I'll just lay down here,
and never give up,
Because the pain of loving you is just to much
Copyright ©
DirtyFool
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2004-05-22 18:50:54]
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Re: Unnoticed
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by Dierna on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 06:59:48 PM AEST
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That is so heartfelt....and so passionate. It's like you're talking about me in the past. Very well written.
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Re: Unnoticed
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 07:36:36 PM AEST
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When you use "too" as in "too much," you need to double the o. This is an interesting write. Writing is an excellent way to work through feelings like this.
Stitch |
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Re: Unnoticed
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by kidpoet_213 on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 08:46:09 PM AEST
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Yepperz!!! I can relate to this as well... being in love w/ someone but going unnoticed... yep... I've been there and done that...
good write... very well expressed in the emotion of it all...
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Re: Unnoticed
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by swiftsouljah on
Monday, 24th May 2004 @ 04:04:55 PM AEST
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The pain of loving you
thats my reality right now....
great job
wayne |
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