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Juliette, Move on, Honey
Contributed by
Elena
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Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 05:20:18 AM in AEST
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A burgeoning heart filled with Romeo alone,
Olive-green Capulet eyes,
Vestal virginity veiling feminine mystery,
Severed by a blade before the morning light.
Sister, we don’t camp on the same ground.
They take us higher now, higher,
Deeper into the darkest night.
Sweet words are a trade, bought and sold:
A come-on or reward for delight.
Sister, we don’t camp on the same ground.
Whose lips our lips have kissed, and fled
Angels of the morning, left lying alone.
Dew on the threshold, a mark on the door,
The only reminder that hearts met here.
Sister, we don’t camp on the same ground.
So Juliette, take your incense,
And on another altar let it burn
String smaller beads on a lesser Rosary.
Bequeath contentment to your daughters.
Mother, we don’t camp on the same ground.
Copyright ©
Elena
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2004-05-22 05:20:18]
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Re: Juliette, Move on, Honey
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 07:50:17 AM AEST
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Fascinating. So much here. A very FULL write. That is a compliment.
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Re: Juliette, Move on, Honey
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 10:04:17 AM AEST
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| I LOVE it... you write very well...keep it up! |
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Re: Juliette, Move on, Honey
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 05:19:37 PM AEST
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I'd try and describe the impression I got, but I feel it would all come out rather idiotically, if that's a word. Religion and lust? An entertaining combination indeed.
"Sweet words are a trade, bought and sold:"
I liked that.
Another notable write.
Keep writing. |
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Re: Juliette, Move on, Honey
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 09:15:31 AM AEST
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WOW!!!!!!! Yes - WOW in big captial letters. This is rich, amazing. An absolutely exquisite poem. Oh that I could have written something so incredible!!!!!!
"Whose lips our lips have kissed, and fled"
(.... pitter... makes my heart ache!)
Extremely well done!!!! |
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Re: Juliette, Move on, Honey
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by Juliet on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:23:22 PM AEST
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| I love how you capture a feeling and put into words, but not obviously enough to lose interest. Great write. I really enjoy reading your work. Keep it up! |
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