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Preserved Perfection
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 12:19:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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you were poetry in human form
'luminosity' attained a new meaning
when I first set eyes
--oh, unworthy eyes! to dare to look upon such as yourself--
upon your silhouette
you were beautiful
you were perfect
you were that type of butterfly
(we learnt of it in school, I think)
of vivid coloration
that died the day 'twas born.
perfection never lasts
I couldn't bear to see your beauty fade
I couldn't bear to see your perfect wings wither away
I couldn't bear to watch the flaws appear
perfection cannot last
except when perfect butterflies
are pinned behind the glass
to save your flawless self
I, nobly, preserved your fragile form--
for butterflies which cannot fly
can never rip their wings.
you'll never rip your wings, my love
I'll not let it be so
and naught but death can e'er protect
your iridescent glow
when you'd been pinned behind the glass
I marveled at the deed
your eyes, still perfect, shone so bright
smooth pearls trapped in a face
your fragile, graceful body
sprawled, ever careless,
on the cold hard floor
and I laughed out loud
because now I knew
your beauty'd always stay
your lips, so perfect,
were captured in eternal elegance
parted just-so
and so very alluring . . .
I smiled at the figure you made,
leaned down,
and, ever so gently,
kissed the dry cool lips
of you, my captured butterfly.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by purplestary on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 12:23:09 PM AEST
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great write..my particular fave part of it:
"perfection cannot last
except when perfect butterflies
are pinned behind the glass"
good job..loved it.. |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by Remy on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 12:32:08 PM AEST
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oh wow... eerie, makes my skin crawl some! but great writing... ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by Black13 on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 01:02:46 PM AEST
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Nice...
Dark...
Very well done Nora.
I liked it alot.
Very morbid and had a few meanings to it.
:D |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 09:07:27 PM AEST
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| Nora, you are very good at writing dark writes. I have enjoyed reading your poetry. I have goosebumps now. Gee, thanks. LOL J/K. I loved this. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 10:34:04 PM AEST
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Very very nice.
I enjoyed it so much!!!
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by brigitte7735 on
Friday, 21st May 2004 @ 02:08:43 AM AEST
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kick ass! I didnt even know it was yours till the end and i was like omg this is so cool, and then i saw it was yours and i was like ohhh thats why. So my type of thing.
Vanessa |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by Stitch on
Friday, 21st May 2004 @ 05:14:00 PM AEST
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I just wrote something about butterflies. I kinda prefer them alive, so I chase them with my camera. Interesting perspective. A little long maybe.
Stitch |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by AnGeL_M on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 01:53:46 AM AEST
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This Was Really Dark & Very Awesome Read
Loved It !!!! You Have A Way With Writing Dark Poetry Keep It Up & Keep Em Coming :-)
LoVe - AnGeL |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 03:08:17 PM AEST
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you did well for your challenge indeed.
I enjoyed this one immensely!
Did the person challenged you this was great too?
And thanking you for all your fine comments that you leave for me too!
love]
ConSue |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 12:25:51 PM AEST
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wow this was awesome and creepy. I don't know what a necrophiliac is but this was friggin rad truly poetry written by a master.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by Chimo on
Friday, 28th May 2004 @ 03:37:26 PM AEST
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I thought it was very powerful
nothing ever lasts now days
especially perfection. |
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Re: Preserved Perfection
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by AnastasiaN on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 09:20:08 PM AEST
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| i'm just reading thru old poems and yours was nothing like i expected. it was actually awesome! i am envious cuz you display so much talent...to show that you can write about anything and make it deep and beautiful and ugly and the same time is talent at it's peak. |
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