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All But Gone
Contributed by
merry
on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 06:32:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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___________________
Silence is the cold response
Twisting pain a little tighter
When I would fool myself once more
Half eaten heart still desires
Any crumb you throw my way
Nourish me and say you’ll stay
My religion, deity, my very breath
Escaped when you abruptly left
Taking every hope and dream
Leaving me to just exist
Hour to hour and day to day
You remain in hidden mist
A shadow attached to every step
Of love and pain I have confessed
You were my world, my everything
Now with pain I am possessed
Candle burns but far less bright
All but gone, my heart's delight
Copyright ©
merry
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2004-05-20 06:32:22] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: All But Gone
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 06:36:34 AM AEST (User
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Yes, we have.
A shadow attached to every step
That is my favorite line. Oh, how wonderfully you write. I watch for your every post.
Stitch |
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Re: All But Gone
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 07:05:25 AM AEST (User
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I like the way you used the term 'twisting' to refer to pain. Nice touch. I like this poem, and can relate to its message.
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Re: All But Gone
(User Rating: 1 ) by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 10:54:51 AM AEST (User
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Oh! I like this! Nicely done! |
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Re: All But Gone
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 11:45:33 AM AEST (User
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you were reading my thoughts over my shoulder when you wrote this poem werent you gaille, twas the crumbs that gave it away, they are not enough nourishment; when selfishly thrown by him, hugs n' loves ya, nessa
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Re: All But Gone
(User Rating: 1 ) by swiftsouljah on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 04:41:31 PM AEST (User
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hour to hour
yeah forget tomorrow im just trying to make it through today
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Re: All But Gone
(User Rating: 1 ) by AnGeL_M on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 08:22:35 PM AEST (User
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Merry This Is Wonderfully Written Loved Every Word !!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep Em Coming :-)
& Oh Yes We All Have Been Here At One Time In Our Lifes....
LoVe - AnGeL |
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