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Torn apart
Contributed by
holderofthestone
on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 08:57:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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In hallow halls
Where teardrops fall
And all your lies resound
I cannot hide
Deep inside
The sounds are to profound
I think again
Of all your sin
And see you do your deeds
I feel you so
Deep in my soul
And you ignore my needs
I call to you
And yet you do
Nothing that I ask
You simple stay
Hidden away
Behind your favorite masks
I only want
You not to taunt
And tease me like you will
Because I know
Because you show
It’s how you get your thrills
I only long
Where I belong
Tucked inside your arms
Where I shall stay
As days pass way
Safe from outside harm
And yet it seems
Awake or in dream
You lie just out of grasp
But I will try
Until I die
To feel you souls warm clasp
But if I don’t
Or if you won’t
Open up your heart
Alone ill stay
For all my days
Forever torn apart....
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Re: Torn apart
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 09:25:41 PM AEST
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Nice! "forever" though is a very long time... trust in yourself and in time. You'll find the right someone and when you do - you won't need to ask for anything, it will be given to you without an ounce of hesitation.
*** Thanks for your note on "There in..." - much appreciated! |
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Re: Torn apart
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by swiftsouljah on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 04:39:07 PM AEST
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"forever torn apart"
how real that is right now for me...
i cant even remember being happy its like a hazy memory that seems like a surreal dream
wayne |
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Re: Torn apart
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by wray on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 07:11:14 AM AEST
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| I like the way you wrote this, almost like the broken up lines represent the fragments of your heart... If all these poems are based on real experiences it sounds like you've had it rough. But I feel you. |
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Re: Torn apart
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 03:52:06 AM AEST
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wow, wow, wow, you dont know how much this one relates to me...I mean it was like I wrote it...I dont kow..I find it really unique yet weird that we are going through almost the exact situation...I think it's a great write...I will try and get to all of them and post comments...I love your writing so much Ima do that...lol masterpieces i tell you masterpieces...your gonna be famous one day...lol you are...your like the only one on this site...I write fricken paragraph long reviews lol...you deserve them...lol very powerful write...lots of emotion and feeling...
much love,
Dani
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