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Plastic Lips
Contributed by
SensitiveSoAbused
on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 12:27:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Feet will pace
so very quick
(Now I have no room to)
trip,
so many things
to do, so many things to keep me
going...
(love this bloody river flowing)
success, a smile,
doing, knowing...
Through plastic lips,
no breath to only
keep on showing
keep on showing
"Yes we see"
(you say
that you know
that)
everything is going good,
everything is going
well outside,
while inside
everything is going
everything is going
this will not keep
i cannot keep
going, everything is...
crumbling, fading, falling,
I'm crying, hating, calling --
Please let me
shatter
me, this smile gone,
now let it fall because
i cannot stop
this, everything
is going...
Copyright ©
SensitiveSoAbused
... [
2004-05-19 00:27:19]
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Re: Plastic Lips
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 12:56:27 AM AEST
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Verry interesting, thought provoking write.
peace,joy,
emy |
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Re: Plastic Lips
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by JT on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 02:28:10 AM AEST
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| nice write. the words just flowed..... |
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Re: Plastic Lips
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by Avarice_Riot on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 03:41:55 AM AEST
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| Very cool and rhythmic flow of words there, it gives intensity and depth to the poem. Great write. |
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Re: Plastic Lips
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by Another_Dimension on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 09:45:04 AM AEST
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| Ive said it before, i'll say it again. I like your style. this was very good, i like the way you tilt the letters and space them out and what not. Great! x x x |
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Re: Plastic Lips
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 21st May 2004 @ 01:51:05 PM AEST
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| this seems sad to me...maybe im reading it wrong though...i think this flows very well. can i ask though? whats it about? |
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