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Fear Of Drowning
Contributed by
pixie
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Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:10:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I’ve seen this happen a hundred times before,
Now it’s my turn to try and swim to shore,
I’ve always been a great swimmer all through my life,
Even when the feelings of hurt have been rife.
At the moment my heads above water,
Many different ways of survival I have been taught,
But I’ve learnt to go it alone, that’s my way,
I’ll always live to fight another day.
Sometimes I feel my head just going under,
Should I let the water take me, I wonder?
My answer is no, no and no again,
From sinking I will refrain.
It’s easier to submerge and sink to the sea bed,
Than struggle on with the battle in your head,
The sea is sometimes choppy, sometimes calm,
You’ll feel pain but hopefully won’t be caused too much harm
The shore is within reaching distance,
I can feel the current pulling me, I use my inner resistance,
I make it and lay on the wet sand,
I grab the grains and hold them tight in my hand.
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Re: Fear Of Drowning
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:23:26 PM AEST
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keep fighting...I can see the glimmer of your inner light...soon you will be shining for the world to see...
Shari |
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Re: Fear Of Drowning
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by Another_Dimension on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:25:05 PM AEST
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| Nice imagery here, just a tip, try rhyming so each line has the same amount of syllables :) its hard, but the poem sounds great. x |
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Re: Fear Of Drowning
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by afraid_of_fear on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:55:52 PM AEST
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I hear beautiful optimism here.. great imagery and a great poem..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Fear Of Drowning
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:59:01 PM AEST
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i like that the battle you paint isn't quite easy, but not really hopeless either... superb write! ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: Fear Of Drowning
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by StrangeLittleGirl on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 04:05:46 PM AEST
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| Brilliant poem, one that I'm sure most will understand and can relate to :o) |
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Re: Fear Of Drowning
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by JT on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 09:59:41 PM AEST
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| well written. Struggling with inner termoil and outer pressure. keep it up |
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Re: Fear Of Drowning
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 12:20:15 PM AEST
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beautiful strong poem of inner strength, well written:) hugs n' love nessa
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