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a mirage
Contributed by
krisseee
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Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 11:18:15 AM in AEST
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whilst walking through my dream, i came across a girl,
her eyes just drew me in, she wasn't of this world,
she told me of her pain, of how they drove her insane,
i turned and walked away, nothing i wanted to say.
her visits didn't cease, she came every time i slept,
every time surrounded by peace, and yet every time i wept,
said for years and years she'll roam,
she's lost, can't find her home,
i turned and walked away, nothing i wanted to say.
i kissed her on the lips, told her not to return,
my tears poured down in drips, and oh did my heart burn,
she made her final speach,
told of how i'm beyond reach,
i turned and walked away, nothing i wanted to say.
she kept right to her word, never returned again,
i was back to loneliness, felt like i'd lost a friend,
stared my reflection in the eye,
told me truths i could no longer deny,
i turned and walked away, nothing i wanted to say.
now my eyes can see
that girl was really me
just a mirage
of what i'm going to be.
Copyright ©
krisseee
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2004-05-18 11:18:15]
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Re: a mirage
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by arden on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 11:29:30 AM AEST
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wow....
i loved this. i find it really sad. i dont know what to say cuz this poem is just so good. wonderfully done. this was pure greatness.
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Re: a mirage
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by Black13 on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 01:08:53 PM AEST
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This was d*mn good.
I think alot of people male and female will be able to relate to this.
Incredibly good write.
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Re: a mirage
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by n2dep2care on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 02:42:11 PM AEST
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Surprising ending! Haunting, Sad and very Beautiful write. Losing apart of yourself is as hard as it can get. Very well written. Bravo!
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Re: a mirage
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by mountainhigh on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 06:08:54 PM AEST
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We are our most harsh critics, and seldom do we give ourselves credit. But who better, to know us and to say.
I liked this much, thanks for sharing.
Chris |
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