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Unfitting Picture
Contributed by
Mortis-Dark
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Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 02:59:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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The picture doesnt fit without you.
Walking alone in this place of inner solitude.
I cant fight back the wave of tears.
Drowning my fears with beer after beer.
My apology wasnt sincere.
Its so hard to talk to you.
This feeling is a terrible instinct.
I need to find you again.
Seek for what was mine.
Left behind in the dust.
Only to shed my armor for it to melt and rust.
The stars dont shine bright.
Night is cold and black.
Thoughts of the times we use to spend.
Lay suspended in the heavens.
Our star.
The one that shone brightest.
Has now burnt out.
Like a candle going through a wash.
Honey on tree's.
Laughing in the high grass.
Standing where we once stood.
Hoping for more.
Just wishing for better.
Copyright ©
Mortis-Dark
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2004-05-17 14:59:51]
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Re: Unfitting Picture
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by lil_angel on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 03:17:10 PM AEST
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| This is really good! |
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Re: Unfitting Picture
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by bleeding_chains on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 03:36:19 PM AEST
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| this is an excellent poem. a very good right. |
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Re: Unfitting Picture
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 05:06:39 PM AEST
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wonderfull poem and expression:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Unfitting Picture
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by Stitch on
Friday, 21st May 2004 @ 09:44:00 PM AEST
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I would take this one. There are some interesting lines here.
Left behind in the dust.
Only to shed my armor for it to melt and rust.
The stars dont shine bright.
Night is cold and black.
Thoughts of the times we use to spend.
Lay suspended in the heavens.
I like this stanza. I have been through something similar. Those experiences make for powerful writing.
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Re: Unfitting Picture
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by arden on
Friday, 21st May 2004 @ 09:48:51 PM AEST
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again very sad, fulled with deep emotion.
this was wonderfully written.
enjoyed this alot.
well done.
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Re: Unfitting Picture
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by Archie on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 07:21:57 AM AEST
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I like this one, It seems like a song. A driving melody of guitars and a strong drum beat is what I imagine.
Do you play an instrument? I do not but I sing very well. |
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