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Obviously
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 11:40:52 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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It is written all over you
I see it there as clearly
As if it were printed on your t-shirt.
Your world is crashing in
And you’re struggling to know
What to do or not to do about it.
You’re pretending that you
Are in control, that it isn’t happening
Though it is obviously so
It is screaming within you
I hear it now as clearly as
If it were blasting through the silence
Your heart is torn apart
And you’re wanting to know
Who will care or not care about it
You’re thinking that you
Are in charge, that it isn’t overwhelming
Though it is obviously so
Obviously
I’m right there with you
Obviously
That’s how I know
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Silent-No-More
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2004-05-17 11:40:52]
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Re: Obviously
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by arden on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 03:21:50 PM AEST
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i really liked this. filled with deep emotion. very well written. a very poweful write.
well done keep up the awesome work.
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Re: Obviously
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by holderofthestone on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 06:40:45 PM AEST
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Obviously
I’m right there with you
Obviously
That’s how I know
i feel this way towards someone in my life and sometimes i think she doesnt even know that im there, i like this poem alot. very emotional. great work |
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Re: Obviously
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 12:51:30 AM AEST
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Very expressive and quite thought-provoking. I love it (I'm determined not to use the word beautiful again, I use it to much) So i'll say that its gorgeous. That last stanza-verse-thingy is just a perfect ending.
Take Care
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Re: Obviously
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 03:51:53 AM AEST
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Wow, so powerfully emotional. Funny how life has a way of inspiring a poem. Yet, I feel your poems aren't merely just a poem, they are vivid in raw emotion and brilliant in the way you write; again, seeming so effortless.
Very well written.
Thank you,
Timber
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Re: Obviously
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by ButchHoward on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 10:55:44 AM AEST
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Thanks for empathizing with me. It's like you are reading my thoughts and looking inside my psyche. Powerful intimations of self struggle. Amazing write!
Butch |
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