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black false kisses
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 01:50:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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twas not as if he were a snake that bit me
more like deep in my heart where he hit me,
for many dreams and hopes rose; then froze.
we were one; each for the other; the same
now as the days go by and i forget his name,
nothing remains between; this all unforseen.
walls thick and impenetrable; time to let go
just his forlorn folly; only by the way apropos,
oh, i should have known; his heart is a stone!
and with every fiber of my being; loved him
unreturned; turns out i was merely a whim,
his black false kisses left a stain; and pain.
one thinks birdsong and melody here to stay
yet when his kisses suave; up and flew away.
bliss: hearts have stopped for less than this.
oh, that piece of my soul i want sent back
like stolen photographs; unreturned and kept
by one with no right; to hi-jack.
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ladyfawn
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Re: black false kisses
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by shelby on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 01:59:48 AM AEST
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Oh Nessa
you ok? this is so beautiful but so damn sad and heartbreaking...... your to sweet and precious to be so sad and unhappy.....Need a hug?? Here comes a huge one!!!!!!
Michelle |
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by JennyFruFru on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 02:00:04 AM AEST
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| this is so sad nessa.... what a great loss.... sorry hun :) :) :) i liked the title a lot... tho... |
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Re: black false kisses
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by venkat on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 02:12:04 AM AEST
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Charged with great emotion, heart burn and sadness..deep and powerful poem..I can see your heart and soul filled with subdued grief and anger and also the mentalstrength you hold...Loved this write.hugs my friend..:-) venkat
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Re: black false kisses
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 02:22:47 AM AEST
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Deep, dark and beautiful under a soft cover of intense sadness. This poem really touched my heart.
Hugs,
Hur |
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Re: black false kisses
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by SarahBelle on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 04:01:29 AM AEST
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| I really liked this poem. It's amazing how much we can say in such a short poem. |
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Re: black false kisses
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 06:17:22 AM AEST
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Love sure does hurt, doesn't it?? Emotion-filled and beautifully written...
Better days is my wish for you..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: black false kisses
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by bernard on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 08:23:16 AM AEST
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A sad poem one with which one feels that a hurt is still painful. An old adage is, Time will heal all wounds. I wish you a happier life in the future and then more positive poems. keep smiling
bernard. |
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Re: black false kisses
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 10:52:51 AM AEST
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"Re: black false kisses (User Rating: 0)
by Anonymous on Monday, May 17 2004 @ 10:41:39 CDT
It started out good like adam and eve in some sort of wonderworld.Then you lost me.A good beggining.But lacking"
i have been hoping you would make the mistake of posting a comment on one of my poems, i have watched you for two weeks making rude and weird comments on our poets poetry, well, now your isp is going to be tracked, so have fun for the rest of the day,
ladyfawn.
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Re: black false kisses
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 12:52:24 PM AEST
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| Nessa, my friend, I hope you are ok. This was such a sad read. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: black false kisses
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 01:11:47 PM AEST
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Wow, you've expressed deep pain here and so poetically. Your piece of soul need not be returned,because you could never just give it away.It is YOURS and he never deserved even a spark of it! Hold it tightly...
:::::breathes a breath of soul into Nessa::::
{{{{{{{Nessa}}}}}}}}
Angel always...godspeed...joni
p.s. And this anon person???
You get em' girlfriend!!!!!! :-)
looks like they messed with the wrong poetess,eh??? ::::highfive::::: |
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by arden on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 03:04:08 PM AEST
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oh nessa this is so sad girl :(
beautifully written. filled with deep sad emotion. so well done.
i enjoyed this.
Arden |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 04:06:09 PM AEST
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Great analogy, Nessa, false love = black kiss. It is rather like the bite of an asp isn't it. Great piece of work here.
Luv n hugs,
Rita |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 07:43:02 PM AEST
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Aww hun! I know i say this every time but this is so beautiful and so sad...awww *hugs!*
Believe me when i say any man who can hurt someone as pure as yourself is not worth the time or effort
Hugs 'n Love
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by afraid_of_fear on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 05:02:46 PM AEST
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Ness this is so sad.. but so beautifully written.. hope you're okay.. hope to speak to you soon..
charlotte x_x_x |
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by Merry on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 06:30:20 PM AEST
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Nessa I think this is one of your best writes - emotional and strong - telling it like it is - oh he must be a snake to not return your photograhs, some men just aren't worth the trouble.
Hugs and daisies sis,
merry |
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Re: black false kisses
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 08:54:23 PM AEST
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| heartwrenching yet lovly. well done. |
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by brown on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 12:17:16 PM AEST
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| so well written |
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Re: black false kisses
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by jaavys on
Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 11:59:55 AM AEST
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| if it is sadness that makes you write so well, that is good for me, i like to read you. but i known that we can't be sad forever. it's a sad state of affairs to be a poet and to live by ones poetry. |
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by Soulless on
Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 11:41:51 PM AEST
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This poem paints such a beautiful masterpiece into my mind. I absolutely love all your poems. I could never just pick one but you and your writing as a whole. This piece flows beautifully as well as giving me new feelings expressed through your work. You truly have a remarkable talent.
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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by Archie on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 04:18:52 PM AEST
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Wow that truly was an awesome write.
True love is the end of bitterness and the begining of eternity. |
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Re: black false kisses
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by wyrd_faerie on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 09:06:06 AM AEST
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| ness, this is one of the best poems of yours i have ever read...so profoundly beautiful, i love the last stanza. gorgeous. |
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by silent on
Wednesday, 21st July 2004 @ 08:07:50 AM AEST
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You are one of my favorites and this poem is just another reason why. Brilliant
Silent |
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Re: black false kisses
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by Always on
Thursday, 22nd July 2004 @ 10:04:02 PM AEST
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| Great emotion, but bummer for why it is here........ |
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 09:06:45 PM AEST
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| Nessa, I probably already commented on this write, but I'm just so amazed by the way you write. *S* Cynthia |
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by Kitty_cat on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 08:21:54 AM AEST
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This poem is absolutely amazing...i can feel your pain, and by the looks of all the comments you got, so can everyone else! brilliant.
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