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cloudy shield
Contributed by
shorty_52
on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 08:09:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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wise old woman
of younder field
i need to borrow
your cloudy shield.
i need it soon
its almost to late
they are coming for me
through younder gate.
i'll give it back soon
without a scratch or dent
for if you let me borrow it
they won't find my trail or sent.
just like last time
i wait and i wait
i ask again
for it's almost to late.
then at last
she nodds her head
i disappear
they think i'm dead.
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Re: cloudy shield
(User Rating: 1 ) by Overstated on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 11:40:59 AM AEST (User
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very mysterous poem enjoyed reading it wow - very unusual write - well done - will read more of yours see if i can figure out whats behind this poem... |
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Re: cloudy shield
(User Rating: 1 ) by HellsLibrarian on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 10:44:35 PM AEST (User
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I liked it. Weird, but interesting. and in line 16, change "to" to "too." |
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Re: cloudy shield
(User Rating: 1 ) by SugimotoYouki on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 05:38:56 PM AEST (User
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I appreciate the scenery this creates in my mind...
keep going ;) |
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