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February Eleventh
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 11:23:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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February eleventh is a hell of a time to buy a calendar
But you do.
Because you’re fifteen and there is a sign
That says seventy percent off and
You’ve got some singles in your pocket.
Enough even, to buy a soda at the food court.
Your presence there is irritating
Disturbing the moms with their little kids
You talk, excitedly, about things that don’t
Mean anything.
Everything is twice as big as it should be
Louder than it has to be – and
Less important than you know.
February eleventh is a hell of a time to buy a calendar
So you don’t.
Because you’re not a kid anymore and you know
It’s only on sale because no one wants it and
You’d rather have the singles in your pocket.
Save them for a bite at the food court.
Your presence there goes unnoticed
Watching the moms with their little kids
You think, peacefully, about the things that
Mean the most.
Everything twice as big as it used to be
Quieter than it once was – and
More important than you know.
February eleventh is a hell of a time to buy a calendar
Yet you do.
Because you don’t remember January anyway and no one
Wants the singles in your pocket when you go.
Have another dinner at the food court.
Your presence there is common
Envying the moms with their little kids
You reflect, gently, back to the things that now
Mean everything.
Everything twice as big as you imagined
Louder, quieter, and then silent – and
Ever important that you know.
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Silent-No-More
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Re: February Eleventh
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by bernard on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 11:26:32 AM AEST
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A good reminiscing poem. I like the way you emphasize the date in your verse. Top marks for a good write.
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Re: February Eleventh
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by LouisaMontagu on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 11:27:46 AM AEST
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I really enjoyed this,, brilliant write...
Well Done
Louisa xx |
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Re: February Eleventh
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by arden on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 04:13:14 PM AEST
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a really good write. loved it.
5 stars.
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Re: February Eleventh
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by Stitch on
Friday, 21st May 2004 @ 11:37:04 AM AEST
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Interesting. This held me spellbound right to the end. I can relate to those times alone in the mall. Well done.
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Re: February Eleventh
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 06:13:42 PM AEST
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Oh that I could have caught but a portion of any missed inspiration as this FELL out. Perhaps the circle turns more slowly at times, but turn it does and it always does so with occaisioned repetition. DejaVu is certainly not an accident. Here we find ourselves again, different circumstances, different decisions, different results ... and still time moves on.
I ramble ... but hope I make sense.
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Re: February Eleventh
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 12:45:05 AM AEST
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A Brilliant write here, I especially like how the time passes in each stanza-verse-type-thingys, and how it shows the changes. Very nicely done.
Take Care
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Re: February Eleventh
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 03:25:11 AM AEST
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Very interesting. We were talking about time and then I pick this one to read a day later. I really like the way you show how the person grows in this and I love the way your poems hold the readers interest from the first word to the last.
Very nicely done; never boring, Snem.
Take care,
Tim
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Re: February Eleventh
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 03:27:01 AM AEST
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Sorry, I should have said never disappointed in your writing. Boring has sort of a negative connotation to it.
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Re: February Eleventh
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by ButchHoward on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 10:09:10 AM AEST
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I like the way you have followed the stream of consciousness from puberty to adulthood. It's interesting how our age and experience affects our decision making process while experiencing the same set of circumstances. Nicely done!
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Re: February Eleventh
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by Spike on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 01:30:59 AM AEST
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Hi Snem,
I'm trawling back catalogues, not leaving out Januarys.
I think I was more scared by the progress of a life through a mall then the aging character and their direct experience of life's lessons! As I get older, I want to grow old in the context of a library, or an art gallery... (yes I'm freaking out that I spend too much time in malls).
A potent reflection on the inevitablilty of maturatation, and on the things that matter.
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