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unblown
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 03:38:31 PM in AEST
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he will never understand me
for he does not understand himself;
so very far across the distant sea
for mine to him is a muck of
existance; ahh i am far too sorry
he does not understand my melancholy
i made music for his heart's soul as
if i were a conch shell; we flew
across the waters then all to pieces fell
mistakenly believing one day i would be at
his side; rug pulled from beneath feet
all love washed out with endless tide
carrion birds fly in bright sun above
me, he does not love me, i walk life alone;
happy winds in my sails remain unblown
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Re: unblown
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by emystar on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 03:46:30 PM AEST
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Aaaahh girlfriend, this is so sad but the loss is his.
Good writing.
luv, huggs,
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Re: unblown
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 03:46:30 PM AEST
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I wish for you soft gentle winds to again fill your sails and carry you to a new land filled with love and contentment. One that will last eternally.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: unblown
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by limpingunicorn on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 03:51:50 PM AEST
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Hi Nessa,
This has delicate poigniancy and charm. I read it for or five times and liked it more each time I read it.
Bob |
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Re: unblown
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 03:52:24 PM AEST
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Aww hun, this is so beautiful and so sad. If he doesnt understand you then he is not for you. There is someone out there and that someone will make you so happy that you'll forget all about these hard times.
If someone makes you unhappy my dear mother then that someone simply isnt worth knowing.
Hugs 'n Lotsa Love
- Becca |
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Re: unblown
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by katyqueen35 on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 04:05:50 PM AEST
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awwww you poor thing,
it's really his loss .
great write.keep them coming, |
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Re: unblown
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by faithmairee on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 04:11:23 PM AEST
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Nessa-Unblown blew me away! This is so beautifully written all I can say is WOW!
Hugs-Faith |
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Re: unblown
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by Ilhar on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 04:50:50 PM AEST
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awwwwww broke my heart with this one
{{{{{{{{Nessa}}}}}}}}} remember you are a rare gem and shine bright somewhere is the one that appreciates your light
Shari |
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Re: unblown
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 05:04:02 PM AEST
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Nessa, Listen to Becca...she's right.... You deserve someone who will understand, cherish and love you uncondtionally....
Great write.
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: unblown
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by Cynthia on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 09:12:49 PM AEST
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| Nessa, this was a sad write. I hope it's not true. You are such a kind person, I couldn't bear to see your heart be broken. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: unblown
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by venkat on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 12:12:34 AM AEST
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sadness cntinues from the beginning to end of the poem..I like this line "i made music for his heart's soul as if i were a conch shell"..
which is apt imagery for the title..huggies:-)
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Re: unblown
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 12:32:56 AM AEST
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| I hope this is fictional. A heart breaking write filled with so much sadness. I hope no one does this to you ever. |
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Re: unblown
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by bernard on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 03:03:55 AM AEST
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Do not look back too often. The future may hold a different love one that is worthy of you. Try to smile in spite of.
bernard, |
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Re: unblown
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 12:45:41 PM AEST
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There has never been any doubt of the fact that you are a brilliant poetess. Your words and ideas flow like honey. My dear friend, there comes a time to let go of the anger and hurt and realize things just werent meant to be.
Love is like a butterfly that soars on fragile wngs,
Delicate and lovely as the pleasure that it brings,
If you try to catch it, it gently flys away,
And leaves behind a lonely heart that dreams of it each day
Roses
Larry |
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Re: unblown
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by AnGeL_M on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 11:30:12 PM AEST
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Awe Nessa This Is So Sad Hope Your Ok !!!!
Like The Rest Has Said It's His Loss !!!!!!!
Love & Hugs G/F
********LoVe**AnGeL*********
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Re: unblown
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by Lone_er on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 01:01:39 PM AEST
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| I know the poem is sad but as it is written I find it lyrical and mesmerizing in it's portrayal of resignation but not hopelessness.....Russ |
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Re: unblown
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by Merry on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 03:46:20 PM AEST
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a fool he was who could not see
beyond the shiny countertops
it was never meant to be
{{{{{{nessa}}}}} he is not worthy of you heart.
as always you put your feelings, heart and soul into your poetry and touch us all so deeply.
hugs n love sis
merry |
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Re: unblown
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by Archie on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 05:43:43 AM AEST
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| Love will come again and your ship will find a harbour where love will be your protection. |
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Re: unblown
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by Ethereal_Engine on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 04:43:43 PM AEST
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| Once again top notch writing. This is sad...but if writing about it helps by all means write away. I think its more important to think of the present then the past. All things in the past are used to create the future, but its better to think of the good and be happy and to use those sad negative times in order to prevent them from happening again. |
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Re: unblown
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 17th February 2015 @ 08:58:08 AM AEST
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Excellent ending, and vividly emotive.
This guy was a chump!
Onwards and upwards Nessa; you fly high above the crowd.
~Scorp |
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