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gone in 6 seconds
Contributed by
Marcus493
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Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 09:00:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
hbadday
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If I was gone in six seconds would you remember my name. Exagerate my characteristics or burn me like flames. Even if I walked with the wise and looked at everyone with closed eyes as if i never judged. Never replied with snicker or cry. Would I be kodak wanna capture the moment because I stole it or sell it like art. My embark was in 6 seconds guessin for every last breath I lost wealth would you bring me to life. Kill me with the pain cause I thought that livin was the fast lane. Found youth in my own brain. Cried tears when the sky rained. No haiku but would like if I joined you as you join me . But like me we'll be gone in a flash. While our ashes blow in the wind
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Re: gone in 6 seconds
(User Rating: 1 ) by ShadowDaughter on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 09:05:59 PM AEST (User
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I found this to be as powerful and well-written as your other that I read . . . you're seriously talented and I'm glad you've joined YPDC.
You flawlessly portray a painful possibility that, regrettably, does happen and demonstrate a very astute perception . . . "exagerate my characteristics"--- like I said, flawless portrayal and astute perception. Not much more to be said.
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