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Star of the Show
Contributed by
kailadragon
on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 06:50:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I see you in the sunshine
I see you in the rain
I see you in my dreams at night
and I feel you in my pain
you're everywhere in this place
wherever I may go
You're number One in my life
Star of the Show
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kailadragon
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2004-05-13 18:50:47] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Star of the Show
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 02:16:56 AM AEST (User
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Excellent rhythm, although I would have ended on six syllables, like the previous rhyme before it . . .
"You're the star of the show"
. . . or something. Just a suggestion.
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