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The Fallen
Contributed by
Tripod
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Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 10:27:56 AM in AEST
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We try so hard, and yet we fail,
We seemed so strong, but still we’re frail.
Never again will we laugh and smile,
We’ll fall and ponder, was it all worthwhile?
The best that could happen now it seems,
Is to fly away at night on moonbeams.
We will never see a true free world,
But maybe you will in a new dream world.
And as the passage comes to an end,
It almost feels as though we’ll ascend.
Yet as I speak the dark envelops,
And where we are heading there are no slipups.
The end is near, and yet I’m afraid,
But I hope its fast and not delayed.
I’ve reached the end, I know it now,
And only one message they will allow.
It’s time to die, and time to fly,
I wonder if they will hear my cry.
I wish I had never come here now,
Please end strife now, give me your vow.
Copyright ©
Tripod
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2004-05-12 10:27:56]
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Re: The Fallen
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by SweetRhythm on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 11:14:13 AM AEST
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Excellent read with good rythem & movement, very touching & powerful with good choice of words. I enjoyed it a lot as its rather gripping. Hope your ok as it gives the idea you wana end it all! I recommend you keep going you'v got plenty of talent to be noted by many..so keep it up!
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Re: The Fallen
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by kayald on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 05:49:07 PM AEST
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| good one TP...thanks for the tip...lol ttyl luv, Kay |
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Re: The Fallen
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 05:59:39 PM AEST
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well written with nice style, and flows great, pretty poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: The Fallen
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by twinkletoes on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 06:08:48 PM AEST
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I like this and I like your tribute also. Sad, so sad.
tt |
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Re: The Fallen
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by SweetRhythm on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 11:16:11 AM AEST
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ok well you'v shure got my vow on that write, it was excellent. But I hope you are sticking around so we get to capture more of your marvelous sounds!
Keep them coming,
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