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dream like haze
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 07:01:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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i sit here, dream like haze,
my emotions creeping out from under the sheets,
velvety sadness, thoughts, feelings,
crumpled and creased,
too delicate to iron out the pain,
i tried to, watched it melt,
destroying this protective layer,
surrounding, caressing me...
...i watch as it falls in tatters to the floor...
try to look through the curtain,
into blinding sunlight,
casts shadows into the room,
dancing images, painting a picture of the way it should be,
i tear at the layers, pull these masks away,
frantically i try to show my true colours...
...but im misunderstood....
emotions come pouring out,
the material frays at the edges,
holes appear, as the binding dissolves,
pull the threads, i want to be free...
take the pillow from my face,
let me breathe the air...
...as the rest of the velvet disappears into the floor...
my emotions are free,
from this dream like haze...
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2004-05-12 07:01:42]
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Re: dream like haze
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 07:08:37 AM AEST
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wow!
that's absolutely awesome!
i love the way you managed to create a whole new fresh idea or way or whatever to express your feelings....
not many people would choose such a way to do it...
very, VERY unique!
and the way you wrote it made me ponder about it for ages...
the flow is absolutely brilliant and the imagery used is very vivid...
altogether, i thought this was spectacular!!!!
thanks for sharing!
13 year old girl who knows that she wrote a TINY bit too much but hopes no-one will mind her taking up the extra space,
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Re: dream like haze
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 08:36:34 AM AEST
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Wow! Talk about breaking free! You have described your angst and the sensation of tearing it away with skill. Impressive.
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Re: dream like haze
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 10:03:34 AM AEST
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Magnificent emergence, like a butterfly from a cocoon. This is so creative.
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Re: dream like haze
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 09:07:58 PM AEST
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this is wonderully written from your excellent title to last line:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: dream like haze
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by bleeding_chains on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 12:37:25 PM AEST
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| this is a great poem i love the line '..to delicate to iron out the pain..' twas good. i like this alot. |
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