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Fight beneath water
Contributed by
ruby1987
on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:00:43 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I talk to you
You make me Fly
Wen i take you in
I swallow all your love
And wait for it to begin
The colours of
Dark maths in my head
Blood in my hands
Gazing From beneath water
I close my eyes and sin
In the wrestling-ring
of my ***** mind
The voices fight:
Emerge
No stay deep
Youre a ***** *****
Copyright ©
ruby1987
... [
2004-05-11 08:00:43]
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Re: Fight beneath water
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by Hurretje on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:08:00 AM AEST
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Haunting and scraping! Good write....
Greetz,
Hur |
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Re: Fight beneath water
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:19:33 AM AEST
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| you're right. this is weird. but its also good so that doesn't matter. i like your style here. kep up the good work! |
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Re: Fight beneath water
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by loopylou on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:39:21 AM AEST
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| i like this alot its a great way of releasing anger. maybe you could make it longer witha explanation though or replace the swearing??. |
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Re: Fight beneath water
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by bluoreo on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:52:32 AM AEST
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It is weird. But in a very good way. It had a great tone to it. Very good.
-eric |
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Re: Fight beneath water
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 01:13:21 PM AEST
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Sounds as if you are drowning in self pity on this one. Well done I might add! I would say deep...not weird.
Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: Fight beneath water
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 09:51:09 AM AEST
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weird and wonderful, liked it!
wildejohnny. |
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