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Rest and rhythm
Contributed by
Hurretje
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Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 04:32:46 AM in AEST
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Dreams evade so silently
In a vertiginous flight
Through icy blue and shining summits
Of frozen freedom
They sink in warm darkness
As walls echo
A silent scream
Like a pendulum
From east to west to east
This is how my heart swirls around an unbearable center
A churning dance
On a square metre
Beating disquietude
Under a tight rhythm
Sing softly
So that I can sleep
Constantly a calm melody
That guides my dreams
When I wake
In a void filled up quickly
Will you softly embrace me then
So that I can rest in peace
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by bernard on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 04:40:27 AM AEST
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You have built a small masterpiece with this wonderful poem. I am always impressed witrh your command and knowledge of English. Keep them coming Hur
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 04:51:30 AM AEST
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High standard of poetry..excellent imagery..
Heartfully I can say this one is a master piece...great write..venkat
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 05:27:59 AM AEST
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wow!
i agree with the others...
a masterpiece..
maybe this is just me but it made me think a lot afterwards..
nothing in particular..
just--thoughts i suppose..
*furrows her brow*
it left with me an..errr....inexplicable feeling.
that wanted me to know more sorta...
13 year old girl still wrapped up in poem,
katie
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by thumper on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 06:14:02 AM AEST
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Very impressive!! The imagery is just wonderful!!"Through icy blue and shining summits of frozen freedom" really stuck in my mind. I loved the whole work. Kudos Hurretje!!
Thumps ; 0 ) |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by bluoreo on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 07:15:44 AM AEST
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very good. i really enjoyed it.
-eric |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:24:06 AM AEST
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| great quality! and good imaginary work here. this is powerful stuff!! |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:34:58 AM AEST
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I get such a sense of comfort from this. Like a child waking up from a nightmare and calling and the parent is there right away and comforting and soothing. This is the way I think of God. BIG stuff here.
Stitch |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by reilt on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 01:25:06 PM AEST
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| a wonderful piece of writing. i thougt it was brilliant. thank you for sharing. |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 03:56:19 PM AEST
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A stunning work of genius.
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 10:13:14 PM AEST
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this completly cleared my mind of everything else, has left me feeling light hearted, beautiful does not do it justice, this is poetry at its finest, touching the soul of your reader, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by arden on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 08:48:48 AM AEST
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stunning imagery, this was amazing.
i am speechless, words cannot express how well done this poem is.
impressively done.
Arden |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 11:07:53 AM AEST
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Oh My Hur.......I can certainly relate to this fine poem you've written here.
My dreams are certainly similiar, however,
I could never master the words, or the rhymn to put them like your dreams so near.
My how talented you be.........won't be long, published you'll see!
Wonderful reading your masterpieces.
poetic hugs
consue |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by Cynthia on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 05:20:25 AM AEST
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| Hur, this was wonderfully written. I'm lost for words right now. Excellent. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by JennyFruFru on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 07:48:49 AM AEST
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what a wonderful with words here ... so vivid and yes emotional... :) :) :) i like these lines the best
Like a pendulum
From east to west to east
This is how my heart swirls around an unbearable center
this was a wonderful description... :) :) :) good work!!
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by Archie on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 09:51:36 PM AEST
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| This is a very good poem, a great write with much meaning. |
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 03:09:34 AM AEST
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Your vocabulary is always excellent, and it brings your poems alive with your fine choice of words. Well done!
But perhaps it should have had one question mark at the end? It always seems appropriate to me, even when no other punctuation is used.
Excellent piece, Hur!
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Re: Rest and rhythm
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:06:44 PM AEST
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Stunning and majestic.
Wonderful piece, heck I've run out of adjectives. :)
Great job here, you deserve full recognition. |
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